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Annabelle

god please
i know it's been a while
but please give her the strength to fight
help her to make it through another night
let me be strong
let me hold my head up
even though it may be wrong
don't let her see me cry
everytime i think of having to say goodbye

god please don't take her away
she's getting weaker everyday
god how could you
shes only 5
please god help her stay alive
my tears are streaming
shes having trouble breathing
mommy whats wrong
nothing baby, stay strong
did i ever tell you how much i love you?
how much?
all the way to heaven and back
past the stars and the sun and the moon and the sky
past places where astronauts don't even fly

softly she whispered i love you too mommy

and i kissed her goodbye
april 22nd
her 6th birthday
she passed away...
at the funeral service everyones crying
they ask me if i'm alright
believe me i'm lying
i'm sorry for your loss they say
i nod and push them all away
i sit on the dirt
it's a quarter to 2
i whisper
"sweet angel, i love you"
i trace the letters that make up her name
on the tombstone
i kiss the cold rock, though its not the same
Annabelle baby,
if your listening
i tried.

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prompt #2 for saddness
Oh noes!

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  • Antebellum
    August 1
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    Wow
    this was incredibly sad.
    So amazing.
    thanks for entering,
    good luck


  • ChunkyC
    June 14

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    This is very very sad.. On a critical level, the writing is very mediocre to the wonderful feelings you have captured. But I asked for emotion, and you gave it. This was really heart wrenching. I don't have children of my own, for I am young, but I can only partially feel the pain in the poem and my heart already aches.

    did i ever tell you how much i love you?
    how much?
    all the way to heaven and back
    past the stars and the sun and the moon and the sky
    past places where astronauts don't even fly

    This is absolutely beautiful. I think this is where most of the emotion draws from when you get to the end and at the funeral. Just because these lines are here. I do hope this isn't personal.. Great job here.

    Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest :]


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    June 5

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    I know this poem in the heart of my heart, becuase I have 3 angels of my own. So beuatifully done. Best to you in the contest


  • MysteriousWhisper
    June 5

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    Wow this is so incredibly heart wrenching. It brought tears to my eyes. It was incredible but when the line about Annabelle being 5 year old came it hit me even harder and I wished I could have done something. But I couldn't have and it was a terrible tragedy and fabulously written as such. I really got a sense of how you wanted so much to help her. It was really beautiful. great job and good luck in the contest!


  • Dancing Alone
    May 17

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    I can't even see the screen through the tears, this is beautiful. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.


  • Jaffa-
    May 12

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    That was absolutely out of this universe amazing. So much emotion. You have to be strong to write about something so sad and to just let your emotion get away from you in your word. This will defiantly bring a tear to the eye and touch the hearts of everyone that reads it. Amazing write and thank you so much for sharing. xoxo


  • Yenny S.
    May 12
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    Your amazing Jules... its just so unbearably sad. Annabelle, its a beautiful name ~ Yen

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