I awoke from my nightmare
late one night
to the realisation that you're gone
you came to me in a dream
made me feel like chasing lead
I spilled my guts
and ran so far away from you
and your fuckin' lies
your words, my regret
the one thing I should have said
you're so emotional
unbelievable roller coaster ride
that's when I need you boy
that's when I love you most
you're so unpredictable
acceptable work related stress
that's when I need you boy
that's when I love you most
I awoke from my nightmare
late one night
to a revelation, you're not mine
you came to me in a dream
and put a hole in my chest
I spilled my guts
and ran so far away from you
and your fuckin' face
your words, my regret
the one thing i should have never said
you're so emotional
unbelievable roller coaster ride
that's when I need you boy
that's when I love you most
you're so unpredictable
acceptable work related stress
that's when I need you boy
that's when I love you most
Author notes
I think this would work well as song lyrics, I'm not sure if I should work on it a bit more or if I like it the way it is.
do you think it needs more work?
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this does have a very good song sound to it but you would need to elaborate on it a little bit more. there is fact in this piece though....i like it
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i like it the way it is, inventive truthful, well written.
thank you for sharing -
I agree this would work well as a song. I especially like the lines;
you came to me in a dream
made me feel like chasing lead
I spilled my guts
might need to add another verse if you're gonna do this as a song though..
my opinion means little.
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that's not true, your oppinion is appreciated as much as anyone elses, which in this case it's highly appreciated.
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this would work well as a song; definitely rock
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