O pity on my soul is foolish love
Who walks, and lives, and breathes in spite my name
And taunts me with its antic, senseless game
And bars me to the glist'ning stars above
For Love will show the beauty of a dove
Will flaunt its grace and brilliance all the same
And all this time I blissfully remain
Although no hope or change is seen thereof
Yet in this spiteful love there is some fair
For now in every while love is true
And gives you someone with an honest care
A person that has flaws of only few
Who's kindness Love has often made so rare
That person's love is love for only you
A contest entry
- PREWRITE MADNESS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! by Kathraina.
650 points, ended August 15, 456 entries
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i like this poem.
your a great writer.
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Oh wow this is very lovely!
Nicely done with this piece, the flow is fantastic. I love the concept here too.
Bravo
♥ Kate -
Foolish Love?
Maybe as a title? I don't know, seemed mostly about that to me, plus you mentioned it in your first part.... the dove and above rhyme didn't really work for me, seemed forced. Good poem, though I'd double space it or something, it was kinda hard to read all clumped together like that.
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EXCELLENT!
I say excellent because I can't find a better word! That was beautifully written and thanks for the spot out I fixed the grammerical issue and might change up the elements i used for the poem to get a better flow but again brilliant work! -
perfect
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quite good
give it a title though -
BRILLIANT
i love it wow yay brilliant authentic clear poetry wow !!
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For your first italian sonnet this is superb. I would never have known that this was your first by the way your wrote...this is right up my ally! PLEASE let me know if you ever writing something like this again!
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EXCELLENT !!!
I never critize or try to say anything to anyone that would place a piece of me onto anyone else's work. I enjoyed reading this. You have a great way with words. Excellent read!!!
Peace
Jeri
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