glitter dances in her sun-speckled eyes
pretty words linger behind rose petal lips
&& her vibrant hair shines in the dimmest of lights.
the rain may be gearing up for a torrential downpour
&& an overaccumulation of flash flooding and slanted tears
but she can still see the sun shining
even through the grey clouds that loom ominously overhead.
through the cackling friction that thunders at night
&& the lighting storm that reeks of rotation
the stars beam down upon her.
forget spiders and rubix cubes.
forget cheerleaders and country paradoxes.
forget the waters of the earth.
forget the scene kid bows and green mustangs.
remember individuality and painted eyes.
she's discovered what infinity really means
&& she knows that he's worth fighting for.
[ impatience ceases to exist. she conquered. ]
for the first time in her life,
she chose the flower with an odd number of petals.
Author notes
like i said... i don't normally write like that.
A contest entry
- (favorites &+ people who have me on their favorites only) by youhadme-athello..
400 points, ended May 18, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - My 50th contest!!!! by Night Terrors.
650 points, ended May 17, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - EVERYTHING/ANYTHING-PW allowed! by Heva Feva.
400 points, ended June 8, 172 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Energy Makes Energy by individuality.
550 points, ended June 29, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - cheer me up, inspire me by Fay.
500 points, ended August 2, 84 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
1 - 12 of 12
-
another good write here. I love the ending line, choosing the flower with the odd number of petals
-
a good poem, i like all the summer and rain imagery, i wish it would rain right now but the weaher peeps say we are for the enxt few days going to hit high temps
-
Cool...
Good luck and thanks for entering my contest.
-heva -
I drew a lot of inspiration from this. thank you. definitely worthy of a finalists list. Thanks Emmyb
-
forget spiders and rubix cubes.
forget cheerleaders and country paradoxes.
forget the waters of the earth.
forget the scene kid bows and green mustangs.
remember individuality and painted eyes.
for some reason that stuck out to me. I don't know why..but I read and re-read it about six times. I'm obsessed with those lines. Wow.
Do I have permission to put them on my page if I quote you?
-
-
sure, if you'd like.
I thought those would be the lines that confused everyone.
They're about nine people I know. One of them is me.
It's strange. -
-
of course i'd LOVE to. (: I'll do it right now.
seriously? how so?
if thats to personal, than just say. (; -
-
it's not too personal but I'll send it in a message.
just remind me. -
-
ahhh, all right (:
-
-
-
-
-
she's discovered what infinity really means
&& she knows that he's worth fighting for.
[ impatience ceases to exist. she conquered. ]
for the first time in her life,
she chose the flower with an odd number of petals.
i love this so much.
its such a good ending.
nice job! -
the lighting storm that reeks of rotation
-favourite line.
oh wait; no, this is :
forget spiders and rubix cubes.
forget cheerleaders and country paradoxes.
forget the waters of the earth.
forget the scene kid bows and green mustangs.
remember individuality and painted eyes.
-that's freaking magnificent.
she chose the flower with an odd number of petals.
- i love it
this is different to what you usually write but nonetheless, it is excellent; though i think the first stanza is a bit tired.
Adding your comment:
1 - 12 of 12
