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and so she cries.

and so she just cries, like she's chopping onions
...but she's really not.



"there's blood all over my fucking bed"
that's what you shouted at me. as if it's my fault.


                    (but i didn't make myself bleed, now did i?)



Call it karma, I guess. It's the only explanation i'd like to believe.
I don't want to believe you wanted to hurt me.
[you can only hide the truth for so long.]



I close my eyes and I can see you dead.
I close my eyes and I can see you dead.
I close my eyes and I can see you dead.
I close my eyes and I can see you dead.

but when i think of it i really don't want to see that
even if it's just an image, not real.

'cause i've seen nightmares come alive before.


even when you yelled at me, punched dents into the walls, insulted me.
the only thing i could think about much of a nice guy you were when i first met you.
i didn't think about the way you were now.


you said you could ruin me.
you said you would fuck me up and all of my friends up.


...you weren't lieing.


and so she just cries, like she's chopping onions
...but she's really not.

Author notes

I haven't written in a long time
the reason why it's so rough is because it's true.

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  • ajocean silver member
    May 14
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    brilliant


  • Genovefa
    May 14

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    Very powerful,very real with such an inner anger and sadness in it.

    I love the beginning.
    "and so she just cries, like she's chopping onions
    ...but she's really not."
    and the repeat of "I close my eyes and i can see you dead".While reading that i imagined the girl rocking back and forth and whispering it.

    It is thought provoking and has very tangible,very real emotions


  • Antebellum
    May 13

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    "I close my eyes and I can see you dead."
    I really like how you repeat this. it deffinitly makes this stronger.

  • gorguzem
    May 10

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    wow this poem is really good.
    don't stay with a guy if he's like this... no woman deserves to be unhappy in a relationship.


  • Andi. gold member
    May 10

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    holy moly.
    this was one helluva deep write.
    thank you ever so much for sharing
    ♥ Dani


  • weepingheart
    May 10

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    deep.

    oh honey.
    all i can say is...
    my heart is breaking. there's an aching in my chest. i hope the meaning is not the one that i feel it is.
    i know i know you not
    but if this is really about what i think it is...
    and you would like to talk...
    you have a friend.

    this is a good write though, rough or not. the best writes are the ones that are rough, full of emotion and true.

    • black lagoon x
      May 10
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      Thank you so much for your comment
      It really means alot to me, that you liked it and stuff
      And it's really sweet you felt how im feeling through the poem
      well what did you think it was about, sweetheart?
      maybe i can tell you if you have it right

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