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Inflections of Strangulation

Barbed wire tracings exploded in cherry works on my skin
connecting the clockwork freckles scabbing over yesterday.

Grenades of plasma shades and sepia rainbows denoted
cross-work stitches rusted grey, that wove my hips together.



Experimental languages dot the Is of frozen lemonade
words, coated like cough syrup, sicky sweet but unreal.

Ink glitters my finger beds, and retro flashing lights
illuminate the pockmarks hiding in the dusty cobwebs.



My pen exploded and poetic blood splattered
and seeped into toxic veins- ethanol poisoning.



I never knew it was possible to overdose on words,
paper thin wings and gasoline doused feathers, but it is.



My heart is still beating   sulfur Vodka and scotch tape
drugs into my lining, and I don't even drink.

My ribs breathe the lost jewelery boxes of Russian Princesses
, Antastasia's broken lyrics, gnarled and pruned like her innocence.


I used to be a little girl who painted ugly cobblestones
with sequins and twigs,and leaves - abstract metaphors.

 

Once i painted with passionate brilliant strokes of nothing

scratches of crayon shavings became my wing thin paper.

 

 

 I'm not little anymore- but its questionable whether I'm
still defined as a girl- my eyes feel like skeletons when I breathe.


Air whistles through the brittle evanescent lungs, that leaked
hot balloons to crying babies, and was left with nothing.

 

 

If overdosing is about numbing- why does it feell like everything's broken?

 

Words flooded my system but I'm still suffocating. 

Author notes

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☼Passion
☼Brilliant
☼☼Sulfur
☼Barbwire

☼Ink
☼Language
☼Retro
☼Experimental
☼Glitter

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  • Kathraina silver member
    May 16

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    WOW!
    The imagery here is absolutely fantastic! I love your word choice, it made me excited to read the next line!
    Bravo!


    ♥ Kate

  • Oh my gosh this is amazing, all of these metaphors were astounding! Its good to see fresh writes and what people can come up with. I loved how you used the words.
    There really are no words that I can come up with that explains this write, it seems to have a life of its own.
    These were my favorite parts though:

    I never knew it was possible to overdose on words,
    paper thin wings and gasoline doused feathers, but it is.

    My heart is still beating sulfur Vodka and scotch tape
    drugs into my lining, and I don't even drink.

    Air whistles through the brittle evanescent lungs, that leaked
    hot balloons to crying babies, and was left with nothing.

    Oh my gosh this is just stunning.

  • cross-work stitches rusted grey, that wove my hips together
    -woah; that is just freaking amazing imagery, you realise that?

    Ink glitters my finger beds
    -stunning.

    sulfur;jewelery
    -wrong spelling i think.

    My pen exploded and poetic blood splattered
    and seeped into toxic veins- ethanol poisoning.
    -i am in love with this. i love 'poetic blood' i think that is really creative.

    My ribs breathe the lost jewelery boxes of Russian Princesses
    -not quite sure what that means; but the diction is flawless.

    If overdosing is about numbing- why does it feell like everything's broken?
    -holy crap. i love it