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After the rain

Once I had a heart
that was beautiful and true
but all that changed after everything
you have put me through.

Heartless yes this is what I may seem to be
but for you to think that I could be
lovable and me again that would be
nothing but a dream.

Once I loved you so dearly that
I fought for you with my every breath
but when you changed and showed your true colors
you broke my heart and soul and you laid
the old me to rest.

There seems to be nothing warm about me and
that sparkle in my eye has turned to nothing but
a cold burning flame for what you have done to me
I hold my head down in shame,
and inside I'm shaking with pain,
but then this is what happens just like the
old leaves fall off the trees
things are different after the rain.

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  • Jeb
    May 13
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    Ouch!

    I think I know exactly how this feels. I have been in damn similar situations many times, and it always hurts. I think you did a good job writing this piece, it speaks it message very clearly. And the metaphors are excellent, a perfect touch! Overall a damn good write!