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Furthur

My temperature
seemingly changes in instances.
The pieces scatter
but are still collected
they run together,
but now with different task.

I climb
onto the bus
it travels and moves
to it's destination
which is always further.

Gliding along
the windy pathways
the wooded hills
through the low points and crevices.
I love this place,
it is so beautiful
and it seems to have
all of Earth's natural wonders
all the incredible sights
so I've settled in my location
of FURTHUR.

My emotions begin to stir
my mind begins to race,
but my defenses losen
things begin to slow...
I am human,
this is life,
a game of manipulation,
but one should learn to conrol themselves,
to see their souls intentions,
to play the star
in the ongoing movie.

Each person seems to have their status,
the police,
the corrupt politician,
and you,
and I,
and it seems as though
we've chosen our roles.

She is mother,
he is brother,
she is daughter,
he is father,
and I play many different roles
and you are?

It seems as though
we're still the same
with different roles

in our life's game.
No matter the direction, each one of us takes,
I know that we will at some time meet,
at the known location,
of Furthur.

Author notes

Inspiration, Ken Kesey.
Also, credits to The Electric Kool-aid Acid Test by Tom Wolfe.
An intentional random mix of things to capture a moment. I don't know quite where I wanted this to go, I suppose it's more of a free flow of thought.

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Comments


  • CanadianGirl1
    May 9
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    I absolutely loved this Bc... wonderful write (smile)


  • corrupt angel
    May 9
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    I enjoyed this. The beginning is so descriptive. I felt like I could see these hills, and paths. Like taking a relaxing journey. Then the ending is wonderful as well. Like everything is interconnected in someway. I found the entire piece to be very refreshing, like a breath of cool fresh air. Great write darling!


  • Mr Id
    May 8

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    And a successful free flow of thought, too!

    I think this is actually quite focused. It works well.

    I like all the different places this goes, though it all comes back to the main point.

    Nice write!

    Id X