Oh, colder than the mountains and the seas,
the stars that serenade the dusky skies,
a melancholy song that fades and dies,
a waif that haunts the sleepless, scented breeze.
Oh, how they shine and how they sink and swoon,
each restful star another dying sun,
or story that is yet to be begun,
oh, hollow skies beneath a cloudless moon.
They rest upon the pillow of the night
and brighten as the darkness rushes in,
above the moon, a crescent pale and thin,
those silver lamps that lend sweet heaven light.
A thirsty sky that gives before it takes,
the drowsy night that breathlessly awakes.
Author notes
This is the form English sonnet.
Please tell me what you think
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What sumptuous beauty you attain! "They rest upon the pillow of the night".
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Excellent
Stars are cool. No. They are really hot, aren't they?
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Excellent rhythm and rhyme with an age old theme. Well done here. It rolls along beautifully.
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your poem reads like light reflecting off lambskin, soft and warm. -silverfish
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great imagery, I really liked the thoughts that are conveyed about stars the night and the thread of life
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An interpretive sonnet of a subject too often expressed in the way you have...Delightful to read quietly or to others..Keep penning!
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superb
simply breathtaking imagery about the wonders of our universe and all its glory loved every word.
-scott
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A chilling poem that I like very much! I like what you have done with this nighttime poem.
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a delight to read! filled with fantastic imagery, good rhythm. thank you for sharing your amazing talent. keep writing poet. God bless you always
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Ooooooooooohhhhhhhhhhh! Love it! Pure enchantment here and very shimmery in my mind as I read the lines.
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Bandits United!
How beautiful, there is nothing I love more than nature writes of this kind. You left me wanting to bask in the moon's glow after this. And as far as sonnets go, one of the most beautiful I have read. Congratulations on your spotlight too
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Beautifully done! I have always loved the stars and moon. It gives so much peace, to just sit and watch, listening to the night sounds. You have done a wonderful piece here! Great work! and congrats on the Spotlight!
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What an awesome poem of the 'stars' of the nightly celestial pageant. Your Imagery is delightful, a real joy to ponder these images in my minds eye. I like the phrases you have used in this write and the rhyme is good also. Well done my Bandit Sister!
Write On!
You have been Spotlighted by your Bandit Family today because WE CARE!
Dennis
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You are good and bring new life to poetry. What a pleasure to read your work...mac
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What an excellent sonnet you have composed. And it is a lovely one, of the night and all the beauty and feelings it brings. I enjoyed reading it very much!
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Wow, first of all, I've gotta say that I admire you just for being able to write sonnets! I've been trying to do this, but I never managed.
And this is not just perfect regarding the form (rhyme and rhythm) but also the contents... Your poem paints a beautiful and lively picture of the night, everything seems to fit together so perfectly in this write. And I love the recurring "s" alliterations.
Beautiful... just beautiful.
I'm so glad I got to read this poem!
Keep on writing!
Annie
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Bravo! Masterfully done. I've never written a Sonnet. You've made a difficult form look effortless. 
I love the smooth flow, imagery, content & rhyme. You should make sure you enter this in a contest! Surely a winner. 
I can't pick out a fav part 'cause this is such a marv of a write. 
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Oh My Word~ Wow~ An English Sonnet-
Now that is one form which I would rather have a root canal then pen Beautifully done and Love the weaving of words~ Bravo!!
This does inspire me to want to give this Sonnet a try
Excellente~
Thank You for sharing Your Talent
Best wishes in all You do
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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Beautiful sonnet. I especially like the alliteration of the s and h sounds that permeate the sonnet from beginning to end. It makes this poem ethereal and spiritual.
Wonderful to read this first thing today!
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Wow, this totally captivated me. It is about all those ethereal things that so speak to my heart. Just a compelling and well written poem with tons of delightful imagery. Good work, Bandit!!
Wolfie
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I adore all forms of sonnets, and this one is very well written. You have managed the enviable task of combining flowing language and meter without making the poem seem archaic or overwrought. My congratulations on lovely imagery and economic but effective wording. Peace, Liz
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Very classy piece of English sonnetry here...I have the greatest difficullty creating this type of poetry and have full admiration for anyone who pulls it off so effortlessly!
I particularly love the last couplet ~ fabulous stuff!
Enjoy your day to shine in our Bandit spotlight.
Lou x
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You have a talent for Sonnets I have to agree with Polly about the personificationwith the "thirsty sky" - bloody gorgeous
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Some nice imagery very descriptive although I'm not a fan of Sonnets per say I enjoyed reading this.
Well Done ! ! ..George.....
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OMG! This has amazing imagery. It is beautifully written, and brings us into the light of the moon. I love this!!!
Love & Light
Debbera
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This has beautiful imagery in it - I love the way it makes me drift away into imagination the "thirsty sky" was my favourite part of this poem - it is just a great personification! Brilliant poetry
Polly
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You really have caught a lovely clear night sky here. A very dreamy quality to some of the imagery is a sweet touch.
Thank you for entering my contest
~Ceridwen~
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a good poem with a great flow and sighs of light, i like the ending with stars giving before they take, that works really well.
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SOFT AND LOVELY!!!
Such sweet and precious feelings and thoughts are brought to us by the stars shining at night!
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Thank you for your entry, good luck!
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A wonderful sonnet, full of excellent imagery! It really sings for me, with a brilliant couplet. I love your word-choice. ( I'm not sure about the repetition of "oh" in your sonnet, but thats my thoughts on it)
Good luck to you
Erwin
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Beth a lovely sonnet. Images play host to senses that carry the reader on the breeze, through the sun setting to greet the moon as the pillow of night. Great ending - crescent pale and thin, those silver lamps that lend sweet heaven light. My applause for this
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Star Serenade
Star serenade take cue and key from fair
whose light transpierces Earth's fog atmosphere,
elsewhere grim darkness rushes in to scare
the twinkle from our eyes, send dread despair.
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