I'm a vampire turned inward
Sucking myself dry
Numb of all emotion
I've forgotten how to cry
Yet the deeper I travel
On my journey within
The more I encounter
Of mystery and intrigue
For even in a barren desert
Grow tiny flowers
On sturdy cacti
Reaching for the sun
Flowing through my blood
Are neutrons and impulses
Energy and life explode
Through my every cell
My flesh has not returned to dust
So as long as air flows
Through my lungs
And into my body
I will live!
Following that thought
I arrive yet more intrinsically
At my living core
And discover a lake
Enlivening blue water
Forms a vast expanse
That gives sustenance to me
I ask from whence it came
The guardian replies with zest
“The lake sprung from your unshed tears
And it revitalises you
When you're ripe it will flow through your eyes
Your healing waters
Moments of compassion that you've felt
Are never lost or useless
They wait and nurture you meanwhile
Author notes
Bluesman wrote the first verse. 1.
A contest entry
- In Honor Of My 500th Trophy & Three Years Of Sobriety by BluesMan.
6000 points, ended May 25, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Can you perceive God's face deep inside your sorrow and suffering?
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omigosh.. this is just amazing. I am taken on a journey through self and into the deepest recesses of sub-consciousness. We all do it.. we forget we are important and we have to have an awakening like this. What an inspiring poem.
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The transition from understanding to understanding is an arduous journey. To know peace is to have first suffered and having suffered hope is a token gained after being sought out and chosen. I loved it!
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A very skilled transition from rhyme to straight.
I love poems about the journey of self discovery and you have written this one well. Very cool metaphor of tears being an infinite sea of healing inspiration. Thank you for entering my conterst Georgia.
I'm doing something a little different in this contest. I thought it would be a cool idea after a poem is posted to give each poet the link to the poem that their prompt came from, so here's your's. I just thought everyone would get a kick out of it. You don't have to click on the link and if you do you don't have to comment either. I just thought you would like to see the entire work.
My Darkness
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3470394
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so beautiful, enlightening and energizing
A must to read in every moment to remind us of hope and never give up on living and be good and kind in every deed, so fresh and exhilarating. Thank you for sharing it. A great help, it pumped new air and blood in me
thanks , plus the words that carry one in this wonderful trip of inner discovery, no need to suck my own blood unconsciously even as a passive aggressor
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Another profound piece my friend! Enjoyed the read and it was great to encounter you once again. It has been a while. Too long!
Blessings,
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Truly lovely, and the move from 1st to second stanza is seamless, despite the change from rhyme to free verse. (Sometimes rhymes happen by chance!) I love the idea of a lake of healing waters inside each of us. Wonderful. Lita
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I wondered why it went from rhyming to free verse. Other that that, you flowed on from his verse perfectly, whereas usually when it's a joint write, you can see gaps and uneasy bridges from stanza to stanza.
As for the actual poem, truly beautiful. I only hope you believe this, and to me it sounds strong so hopefully therefore you do believe...
I love the end two stanzas, they're simply fantastic and also where you have "I will live!" on a new line. Terrific, and best of luck in the contest. That's a lot of points up for grabs.
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Me and Bluesman have written together before and won gold. We think alike. Cheers for the comment!
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