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Here I am still stuck in this prison, they call my home.

It's not so bad,  I learn more everyday.

Every time they criticize me,

And tell me I will never make it on my own.

All I do is laugh. I know that I can, I don't care what they say.

 

I really should thank them,

All their negatives made a positive.

And if I have kids I will never be anything like them.

My kids will have more freedom,

The right to be who they are, the right to live.

 

Stuck here again the arguing never ends

It only makes me stronger only makes me try harder

They call me stupid, call me pathetic, call me useless.

It's okay, I'm so use to it and I couldn't care any less.

 

I really should thank them,

All their negatives made a positive.

And if I have kids I will never be anything like them.

My kids will have more freedom,

The right to be who they are, the right to live.

 

I'll prove them wrong, I swear.

I'm not as stupid and worthless as they say I am,

They don't know me, what's on my mind they are unaware.

They never even payed attention,

The only thing I hear is them telling me is that I "can't"

 

They will never understand,

I won't ever be like them.

And when I have kids,

They will never here the words, that I've heard.  

They will never be told that they only disturb

On my life, I promise this, if I ever have kids.

Shove all the insults they said aside,

In my eyes, My kids will never be denied.

 

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...Some times bad experiences can make a positive influence .....

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  • Ahki97
    June 2
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    i like this one i like how your a fighter


  • jcat gold member
    May 22

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    So upsetting to here this......I was lucky to have such a wonderful mother. I myself became a mom at 16 and unfortunately was not a very good mom...not abusive or anything just uninformed but my mom had alot of patience and taught me how to be a mom. So when my daughter came along 15 years later I was better prepared. I am glad that you are breaking the cycle and know what kind of mom you wanna be!! Many blessings to you.....Thank you for a wonderful entry!


  • Antebellum
    May 22

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    I love the ending to this.
    My mom was raised always beaten and abused by her mother, so all throughtout life my mom swore to herself that she would never be that waay(and shes not) So i understand this.

    "I'll prove them wrong, I swear.
    I'm not as stupid and worthless as they say I am,
    They don't know me, what's on my mind they are unaware.
    They never even payed attention,
    The only thing I hear is them telling me is that I "can't"'"

    I love this stanza.


  • JustSimplyLissa gold member
    May 22

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    So true are your words, a bad experience can make a positive impact in our lives. Your words are heart breaking, no one should ever treat their child that way. It breaks my heart. Especially when there are so many "good" people who want to be parents and cannot. Your words have really touched my heart. Thank you for a beautiful entry


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    May 22

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    Yes you are so right! You will go far in life because it can be so hard to turn negatives into positives. It shows you have strength and wisdom.
    I love your thoughts in this. Thanks so much for your entry
    Gaylene


  • Kari gold member
    May 22

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    Hi,

    You are right about bad experiences. Sometimes it takes those to teach us how to be with things and makes us stronger.

    I am so glad that your kids will have a good mom. I am also sorry for all the hurt and pain you went through.

    The only suggestion I have is to use line breaks more.

    Thanks for your wonderful entry and for following the rules.

    Kari

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