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Excuse Me While I Mess Up My Mind

It’s nearly 7:00 and yet it’s three
I can’t hear the buzzing next to me
“Shut Up!” I say without uttering a word,
before those damn purple elephants herd

The ticking on the wall’s quite strange,
it brings about the vendor’s change
Where was I, oh yes, just about to undress
the naked woman, standing by the camel’s nest

Here it goes again! The lyrics in my head,
can’t make it out, is it Floyd or The Dead?

‘The lunatic is on the grass’
Funny, I don’t hear any grass

‘The Lunatics are in my hall’
It doesn’t matter much now at all

Sleep has failed me, or is it such
that I have failed sleep just as much
Oh, the noise! I can’t see myself think
and cover my ears, I can’t bear the stink!

Could somebody please pull this man
off my back as soon as you can
Damn these flies! Won’t let me rest
they’re so pretty, such nice pests

My thoughts I squander on details
of guts in worms and brains in whales
The tiniest of the largest snail
and the largest of the tiniest tale

      ~Now pardon me, I must get back to
            ~waking up to taking a nap

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This won a silver
"I want to win" added to let you know I read the rules!!


This is the best contest!! Such Fun!!

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  • liquidmindforever gold member
    May 30
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    Yes. JUDGED

    Dear Poet,

    You're among the finalists

    Best wishes,

    and stay
    liquid


  • toomysterious
    May 30
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    Nice poem for the prompt, very strange indeed.

  • piccola silver member
    May 27
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    funny funny and quixotic to say the least. Great use of imagination.


  • Three Doves
    May 19
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    Congratulations on the award. Your talent is most deserving.
    In God's Love
    Three Doves


  • Griswold
    May 18

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    Very nicely done indeed, and I see you visited the gallery and picked up a pic or two of your own. Some great stuff there. This is the kind of stuff I wanted to see. Best of luck... Scott


  • bluewho
    May 11

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    I love it!!! One of my favorite Pink Floyd songs and it blends so well with the prompt and your take on it. Oh, and dare I admit that I felt like you were writing about me... LOL As much as I love the whole poem the ending is the best of all.

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