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Do I Want You Back?

You wrap your arms around me
I lay my head upon your shoulder
This is where I need to be
This is where I feel safe
But I think it's too late

I wanna stay right here
You make me feel like you care
But is that what i really want?
You know I love you
Just not the "stuff" you do

I want to be with you
Not waiting for it to be convenient for you
In your arms... during the school days
On the weekends... I'm all alone
Now I'm always alone

I want to "be with you"
Not your whole life
Just a part
But not pushed aside
Could we make it work?

Author notes

I think it sucks!!!!
Any revisement advice is welcome.
Thanks for reading.

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  • Mrs.Chips
    May 11

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    It does NOT suck!

    The only people who wouldn't get this are those who've yet to experience this, experienced it but was rejected, or maybe is on the other end of the comfort-giving/getting cycle. I think it's great! My only teensy weensy suggestion would be to perhaps change the spelling in the third stanza to "convenient". Otherwise, me likey! The title is very direct, and the syntax pretty appropriate for the confusion you're expressing.