You always could accessorize....
Cold feels damp, tones are muted
the bench a haven, no longer something for
a young girl's momentary stop on hummingbird flight
into tomorrow.
Wry smile and eyes full of love
my makeup now.
Laugh lines catch tears containing
fragile memories.
A contest entry
- Two Ladies by Emmyb.
700 points, ended May 9, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please critique the highs and lows! How does this make you feel? Where does this hit you?
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I love the opening line. There is an "as if" quality to those words. Like maybe you weren't good at that particular ability. The second stanza is brilliantly written, giving the reader a sense of forlorn times when nothing seemed to work out the way you wished.
The last line paints a picture of sorrow that the lines in your face capture. Beauteous work poet. Sadly beautiful! Loved the title.
Much Love Always ♥
Renee
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Deep and delicate
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Thankyou so much for reading and the lovely comment.
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A different take on the prompt. Interesting and dynamic.
Nicely done.
Emmyb -
Cold feels damp, tones are muted
the bench a haven, no longer something for
a young girl's momentary stop on hummingbird flight
into tomorrow.
lovley imagery.
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