Hope for tomorrow
a salty fishy bitter taste
eyes as bright as starts
and hair as thick as rope.
a seamless silhouette as hard as rock
yet with a soft spirit
as simple as a two stringed violin
he is old and all wants and inhibitions are gone
nothing left but his inner peace
and hope for tomorrow
what do you think about my first poem..BE REAL.
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Good poem from your pen. Well written kstew...I am real.. this is a nice job. Keep it up!
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very expressive
the texture of your offering is wonderful, it is (for me) multilayered in imagery and context. I see only one typo and that is to be expected, I think, I only gave you 14 mins to write and then we all had to log on to allpoetry…as I said before, there are flower poems and “the other kind” - - Well, darlin’, yours is – (in my not so humble opinion) – one of the most wonderful floral-type poems, eloquent and authentic. There is a high level of integrity with your content which makes this a delight to read. Your teachers should be honored to have you as a student in their class, you have a great gift for expression, my prayers are that you continue to grow in this craft we share. Blessings and best wishes, ~r.
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did you mean eyes as bright as starts?
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yur an excellent writer (:
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Great
Very Deep.
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