A lost soul wanting a savior,
trapped inside an unclean body,
unable to reach out and grab love,
but inside is a clean and loving spirit,
waiting for one to free him from his flesh,
A savior like Christ, as we all should be.
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This is my first poem.
What do you think?
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hey
i like it...
have you seen the one i made for you and ur gf. You two inspired me to write it.
k. love ya :]
god loves me, you, vlad, stephanie, valarie, hannah, kyndall, megan, and kaitlin the most -
A savior like Christ, as we all should be.
great ending, so very true. -
powerful
i want to thank you for taking the time with me today and for all your hard work - it shows here in this poem. You have captured the essence of what i was trying to share today. The fact that you plan to revise this is very impressive...it shows a maturity right out of the gate; a sign that few new writers posess. If i were your teacher you'd get highest marks for your effort. I hope to read more of your work as time goes on. Blessings and best wishes, ~r
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hmmm..
veryy christ like
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Your first poem was marvelous. Good message from you. THANKS for this one!
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