If I said I didn't love you baby girl I'd be lyin'.
If I said I could live without you why am I dyin'.
Every single thing about you's drivin' me up a wall.
Already down on my knees in case you want me to crawl
Just tell me baby what you need, and I'll get it for you
Cause I'd beg steal or murder if you asked me to.
Your tender smile takes my breath stops the blood in my veins
the piercing hazel of you eyes shimmering in my brain
It's a strange sort hazel and it gets to me
Others may pass by me, but you're all I see
Like a mixture of a whispered promise and a dream
that is how the wonder of your vision seems
I'd walk down a fiery road just to knock at your door
Keeping my hands off you is becoming a chore
The silky shadow where your shoulder meets your neck is the best
I know I'd never get to heaven girl if you were my test
I think you know just how I feel so won't you give me a clue
A bit of insight into what it is you want me to do
Pen it down, shout it out, or email it along
I'll do whatever is right if you will tell me what's wrong
It's a strange sort of hazel and it won't me go
Without a word it says your love is all I need to know
To hold your soul inside my heart would be ecstasy
So please tell me what it takes to get you next to me
Every single thing I write is just a letter to you
With backing music and a foot tapping tempos too
Without you by me I am just another strummer of strings
it's only in our times together that my guitar sings
You're probably sitting in room thinking is he for real
So check the stummin' and the lyrics and tell me what you feel
Until you figure what you want baby I'll be right here
Playing for the crowds that take the time to share in my fears
So bring along that strange hazel when you're looking for me
That very color that will break me and put me on my knees
And if you think that out love like this song will end.
Simply hit rewind, I'd love to do it again.
Author notes
Okay, I decided to go with Kelly Clarksons "Behind These Hazel Eyes". The truth within that song is simply that the eyes, while sometimes the most giving thing we possess, can also be the very thing that hides it all from the world. I myself have hazel eyes that wax and wane though various shades of chestnut and moss with a touch of fairly consistent viridian. That said, I've always found hazel eyes to be fascinating, it's just that sometimes, they can be downright captivating. Hope I did what you'd hoped with the prompt. Thanks for brain boost regardless.
A contest entry
- ♥ Write For A Song ♥ [Your Love Or Mine] by char13.
700 points, ended May 7, 2009, 26 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Has your view of hazel changed somewhat?
Comments
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hazel eyes are the best. I have hazel eyes, but they stay mostly green. funny how they trip people up sometimes. you're right about them hiding the true self within, but for me, I would not make a good criminal, because they tell every thought I have.
Okay, love your song-sometimes when I read, my mind automatically turns the read into a song-this was no exception. the author's note was a wonderful cherry.
thank you.
love,
jin
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Yes, it is a song, and actually a pretty funky one, and I mean that is a good funk kind of way. In fact I played it at the park the other night and had some good responses. Thanks for stopping in to comment, always appreciated.
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I'm not sure
If my view of hazel has changed at all, but all in all it's a great write. I see some grammer issuses, but that is just me, I was able to get through it and get the meaning regardless. I love the emotion that you put into this. Thanks for sharing!
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Hi, I really like this poem and I think you did a great job with the prompt.
The story in the poem feels true and relatable, and the imagery used is also remarkable. This is great. Well done!
Thank you so much for your entry and all the best to you.
P.S. I'm putting you on the finalists' list
♥ Char
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