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Brittle

Fragile formless creature
I’m nothing within monochrome gales
a mere pixilation of the human texture

I’ve yet found strength, an emotion adhesive
Too hold and mend the cracks I’ve
Accumulated through out the days

I became nothing, formless like dust
In uncontrollable cyclones of introspective gray thoughts
I slowly unhinge from cell to cell

Being whisked away into something unfamiliar
Loosing control of what I believed was sanity
Shattering myself into bitter winds.

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Photo credit/link : Prompt: the above picture http://wwwest.deviantart.com/art/Sand-121581611

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  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    May 22

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    I love this, it captures just what I was picturing when I posted this kind of prompt. Beautifully done. Best to you in the contest


  • annother gold member
    May 20
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    Brilliant write!
    Good luck in the contest.


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    May 16

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    Nice job on this poem. The imagery is great. My favorite line is:

    'a mere pixilation of the human texture'

    Very well done.

    Mike


  • Edie gold member
    May 13

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    Oh some awesome lines here...little gifts of vivid imagery.

    "I’m nothing within monochrome gales
    a mere pixilation of the human texture "

    and...

    "In uncontrollable cyclones of introspective gray thoughts
    I slowly unhinge from cell to cell"

    Very lovely and thought provoking...