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Free Flying

 

 

 

how many times she’d dreamt
    of flying ...

        of dying ...

            of being free


no longer tethered
by an invisible thread


in dreams
she never quite made it,
never drifted high enough
never found the release mechanism


 ... until now ...

letting go of the past
the pain, the futility

with one final breath -
   

she was one
with all

moving in every direction



 ... free flying

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt.

'And She Was' Music and lyrics by Talking Heads.

In a list

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • misticmoonlite gold member
    May 15
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    whoah, that was a winner for sure, congrats on the Gold


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    May 14

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    A beautiful write and well-deserving of the Gold award---
    Congratulations and Well Done!


  • daviscth
    May 11
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    This is simply amazing imagery Sue. Congratulations on the golden cup, you earned it.


  • JinSays gold member
    May 10

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    damn Sue, you stole m breath away with this.
    You caught my favorite image of the entire song. . .she's moving in all directions. . .I love the idea of that-saturation into the very fabric of existence. . .wonderful.
    Love,
    jin


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      May 10
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      Thank you so much Jin for the trophy and your kind words and I'm so glad you liked where I took the prompt, but then talking Heads are a great prompt anytime

      Love
      Sue


  • SilentPoetress
    May 8

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    I like this a whole lot. It is very well written. It really flows
    well and the way you have it staged on the page is very effective, and goes well with your poem.


  • hawkeslake gold member
    May 8

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    My dear Sue, on a very personal level, this was so beautiful, and comforting. You write so lyrically; I hope this is really what it is like. It certainly is what I dream of... Lita


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      May 9
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      Thank you Lita for your lovely comment, I hope that my words gave you some comfort and I hope it is just as I describe

      Sue


  • orionrising
    May 8

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    Stunning

    I've got goose bumps runing down my spine. Beautifully penne! Good luck in the contest


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      May 8
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      Many thanks J, it's lovely to see you commenting on my work again. I'm glad you enjoyed.

      Sue xx

  • Bad Bill
    May 8

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    This is quite simply excellent! Your take on the prompt is first class and the poem is written with style and precision. One tiny quibble though - shouldn't "directions" be "direction"?

    Very well done,
    Bill


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      May 8
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      Many thanks Bill for the comment and correction. It originally said 'all directions' and I changed it to every.

      Sue x


  • arafura gold member
    May 8
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    Very good. Beautifully written as usual!


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    May 7

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    This is excellent Sue!!!! I love the way that this piece is written!!!! And the way that your words flow!!!!! This is very beautiful I love it!!!!!


  • csmmoms2
    May 7
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    Well done you took me to the stars at last. -c


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      May 8
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      Many thanks Chuck, I am so glad that I managed to get you to the stars, I hope you enjoyed it.

      Sue x


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    May 7

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    ohhh yes I like this piece and formed nicely...step by step, thank you for sharing, good luck in her contest

    Linda


  • cricketjeff gold member
    May 7

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    haunting

    Well thought through and a great take on the prompt



    Jeff

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