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Nightmare

Fed up stress, hold my breath,
ten seconds flat, swear I'm gonna snap.
Homicidal hands, suicidal plans,
This life I just don't give a damn.
Death can be with open eyes,
stab me in the back a million times
Seems like everyday,
agony, complex, drama, suffer.

Gotta find my way out of this nightmare.
Gotta find my way out,

Reality, anxiety, see the light disintegrate.

Bad omen, loss of hope and faith, irate at god.

Fuck sympathy, remorse, or any other source.

Only enemy, myself, inhale, exhale,

Don't wanna exist give in give up mercy

 

Gotta find my way out of this nightmare.
Gotta find my way out,

 

 

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  • l o v e b u r s t
    July 7

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    "Homicidal Plans, Sucidal Hands"
    love this line. great piece. sounds like a fed up wife or husband about to snap.

    Thank you for entering my contest

  • Mercury Rising
    June 21

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    A dark and twisted and nightmarish take on the prompt and an excellent poem. Best of luck, and thanks for entering my contest.

  • Ahki97
    June 17

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    fucking awesome! dude that was sick
    best thing i ever read catchy as fuck
    shit man you should be famous for this


  • Miss Macabre silver member
    June 16

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    Wow. I really liked this. There was a lot of emotion.

    Homicidal hands, suicidal plans,

    Favorite line! It had a nice flow, and it was a very good write. Best of luck to you.


  • LostinLove399
    June 4

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    wow, amazing peice you got here the emotion pooors off the page and I really enjoyed reading this. Best of luck in the contest and keep on writing


  • Ami
    June 3

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    yeah this really deserved gold I love it it's always stuck in my head My favorite part is the first stanza
    Love ya forevers


  • Jade-
    May 27

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    Nice.

    It was short, but got the point across. Some great emotion in there...I could feel the anger.

    You did a good job.

    Thanks for entering my contest, and good luck.


  • Jazzlyn
    May 17

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    wow this is awesome... i really hope your okay now tho... i'm Amanda's little sister btw
    again great job


  • spideracer gold member
    May 12

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    Hard core metal, that's what this poem brings to mind. It has dark emotions and flows well, a worthy gold trophy winner.

  • nikkie1314
    May 7
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    its great.

    i like that you made the emotions so intence.
    it makes the poem that much better.


  • Almae
    May 7
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    I LIKE HOW IT FLOWS..
    <3STEF


  • understanding-me
    May 7
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    Great poem, I felt the emotions...fab write

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