Gentle breeze blows sweet,
a fragrant cherry blossom scent.
Soothing grief to yesterday,
as this death begins...
I relent
I relent
Familar whisper carresses,
my dreams into today.
Known touch awakens,
as he kisses ache...
Far away
Far away
Lullaby he sings,
just to see me smile.
Love heightens up to heaven,
as our spirits fly...
All the while
All the while
Black bird watches,
perched upon a limb.
Angst grows thick,
fear of seperation creeps in...
Losing him
Losing him
Saftey in his arms,
erasing black birds threat.
Reassurance calms,
the journeys just begun.
I relent
I relent
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The whole piece was lovely but the last stanza was the height of beauty. I like the way you did repetition to make the point stronger between thoughts. Very nicely done.
Maybe I can give you three clappies. LOL I'm gonna try.
Sharon
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HA! I got 3 whadya know!
Thank you for the awesme comment and if I had control over my points I would def. rate this one a 5 star. ;D
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Wow. That was amazing. I love the repetition in there of certain lines. The imagery was stunning. Excellent poem.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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This is such a beautiful, beautiful write. The way you wrote this, wanted me to want more. I love it.
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this was beautiful and touching. you have a way with words that moves the reader to continue on and inspiring them in the process. such an excellent writer you are.
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I'm sending a big V.H. ...
your way, sweetheart this piece is so sweet and loving, and touches this reader very deeply..and the way you've constructed it is also praise worthy..from start to finish, this piece is excellent..P.S. V.H. is virtual hug
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Hugs right back at ya
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