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Last Breath(unfinished)

Close my eyes and sigh,
My last breath is soon to come,
but life will move on

A single teardrop,
rolls down the side of my cheek
and soon disappears

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Not done yet, but the baic format is using haikus. :/ it's going to take a while though

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  • orangepeeling
    July 22

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    Close my eyes and sigh,
    My last breath is soon to come,
    but life will move on

    A single teardrop,
    rolls down the side of my cheek
    and soon disappears


    all that;s my favorite part so far , keep writeing : )


  • deepintheshadow
    May 7
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    Awesome!

    this poem is definetly on a roll! this is really good! thumbs up!