To you, who reads my memoirs,
And holds the value of my thinking's high,
I write for you this simple post
Due to feelings one cannot deny.
I put this pen to paper, a task
Done once before, and in such a
Way that this proposal, you have
The ability to ignore.
I'll never ask if you have read this,
But I trust the knowledge well,
That should you find this offer
Pleasing, there'll be a way that I can tell.
You know me quite some time now,
My strengths and weaknesses exposed,
And of both you are my ultimate, hence
Why this I now propose.
We've spake of this in days gone past,
And the memory never dies, of things
That may or may not have been, and my
Attempts for us to try.
And thus I'll ask you one more time,
If I do not, how can I ever know?
If the rose that once between us bloomed,
May have another chance to grow?
I'll never bring this up my dear,
No hints or interrogations,
But you my dear still hold my heart
And unknowingly, my aspirations.
Author notes
Not entirely pleased with this, but my works always serve a purpose
Comments
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Very nice
It's really nice, and very touching in it's personal approach.I've a preference for poetry that can rhyme and still make sense and steady progression through an emotional state or recollection of an event. You've a good rhythm in there.One thing(since you've stated you like honesty, so please don't shoot me)
I don't think the first stanza flows as fluidly as the ones which follow, which may or may not be why you say you're not entirely pleased, but that's just my personal reading. Then again, I tend to do the same with my own and my stories, the beginning and end are always a bitch to nail, especially the former. That said, your last stanza is the most striking and poignant of them, it's a lovely way of leaving the last word to the reader to think about, and react in their own way to the proposal, and the same time ''getting the last (most important) word in', so to speak.
.That and the fourth stanza are particularly nice. 
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This is beautifully. Don't be displeased with it, It's real, it's raw, and it's captivating. Beautifully done. as usual.....I'm starting to get jealous
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