I wanna write just what I'm feeling
But everything feels so cliché
I'm scribbling away on an 8.5 by 11
But I ball it up and throw it away
Though I don't wanna admit what I'm dreaming
It's kinda something I can't deny
I know I'm not the best liar around here
But I guess I'm gonna have to try
I know just what you think of me,
A good friend, great hugs, no doubt
And after all these great memories
How have you not figured it out?
I don't just love you because I want to
I really don't have much say
My heart is yours, my darling
But you'll never even see it that way
I don't want it to be like this
Stupid hormones, stupid boy, stupid ME
I know I'm just not good enough
Babe... That's the way it'll always be
Author notes
Out of these
http://allpoetry.com/poem/5314845
http://allpoetry.com/poem/5314983
This one is my least favorite.
This was the first one I wrote, and I didn't feel it nearly as much as the other two, so yeah.
I was writing, and I'm just like "Okay, I'm not completely struggling with rhyming, but it's supposed to come naturally."
So then I started on the other two.
Yeah, you can comment on this one, but I'm really concerned about the other two.
Thank you 
Trust me; I KNOW I've done ten times better.
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OMG!!!!! This one rhymes too. Wow I feel sooooo stupid right now. What's up with me and all these blonde moments. Crap, I think I"ve been infected with Ely's dessease!!!!!!!
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always good enough... maybe hes just not right .....
good write..
blessed be
always
green mother rose
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I love the first line of your comment.
Mind if I steal it for a future line in a poem?
Thank you so much, your comments help a lot
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Wow
I mean it's just so real I guess you would say. Like your being upfront and honest (as if you don't always do that) but it's like ur sayign exactly what's on ur mind. I'm probably not making any sense but I can't decide which stanza I liek better. The first one I think. Because it shows you've been struggling w/ writing and everything. And there's that whole admiting ur typically in denail thing. IO liek it. -
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Haha yeah but for some reason I just don't like it!
I guess I just sound so typical.
And uhhh, after knowing you nearly 4 years, that makes perfect sense
I'M NOT IN DENIAL I JUST KNOW HE DOESN'T LIKE ME OKAY?
Ahem.
Thank you for your comment, anonymous kim5519.
Ahem.
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Sad, but I love it.
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Haha, that was the point of the rainbows,
Kinda of an oxymoron to the poem.
Thank you
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Good job...
When I was 13 yrs. old I think I wrote that way. I hope you keep it up. I do enjoy reading your poem's. Sorry you had a brief writer's block.
Don't worry it can't keep you from expressing,
or feeling love or pain.It can make you confused and make it very hard to feel.byeee
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Haha that's probably why I'm being so hard on myself, because I sound like the typical young adolescent, and I read the other genius on allpoetry and it's like "WHY AREN'T I THAT GOOD???" But I suppose a mastermind takes time to form xD I'm glad you enjoy them, I hope they aren't like boring or you feel like you can't connect to them or something awful like that.
Blahh I still hate writer's block xD
But thank you so much for your comment, I really do appreciate it. (:
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great its coming all together now.
check out some of my recent work i dont know maybe it will help you in someway or you might just enjoy them
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Thank you, and I'll bookmark your page so I can read it later
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That may be what you think but i think it's beautiful. Off to read the other two
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Aw xD Thank you very much,
I suppose I'm being negative xD
I guess I just put more thought into it and less feeling, and it just came out differently.
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I'm not usually a fan of rhyme, but your first part really sucked me in. As everyone struggles to be original rather than cliche`, you did a cute spin on it all by itself.. nice
Stacy
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Haha that was the goal
At first I just read the first line you wrote where you're like "I'm not usually a fan of rhyme, but your first part really sucked" and I was gonna be like "I knew it was bad!" But haha yeah thank you xD
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hey! i think this is very good! and you don't have to rhyme to be amazing, just so you know sometimes rhyme comes naturally into the situation, sometimes it doesn't. don't worry if it doesn't. just get it all out! embrace that it doesn't rhyme! lol good write.
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Haha thank you
And yeah, I know, and I tried it because it was flowing, just not as well as the freeverse flowed in the other two.
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