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sour berry

get me fucking high again
so i can fall even faster
and perhaps become ground level
to your wilted rotten flower
ignoring those well placed welts
and trailer trash homemade tattoos
to impale your motherfuckering tart berry

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1. Declassify my blueberry veins

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  • Mango Memories
    July 9, 2009
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    Rawr rawr rawr!

    this one slapped me hard, no like really hard.

    well doone!


  • SpydurPoet
    July 3, 2009

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    Wow. Wow. Brutal and brilliant. I loved this. So violent and beautiful. Awesome job with the prompt.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • whoudini
    June 28, 2009

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    powerful , strong and to the

    point , wow , was very well written, and you could feel it coming straight out at you , good piece and well will look for more .

  • pozo
    May 7, 2009

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    Good piece, very transgressive. I like the darkness of the imagery here and its bluntness. The alliteration worked well on line 6. If I were to edit it, I'd add more contemporary language and maybe even blunter language.


  • PerfectImperfection
    May 6, 2009
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    Hmmmm... Damn. That is fierce man. Nice take to the prompt!


  • Haley-baby1
    May 6, 2009
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    this is fierce. i like it. alott. "get me fucking high again so i can fall even faster"
    niiiice

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