See my home for the last, hug my son for the last,
Board my ship for the last, leave my home for the last,
Raise the sail and the mast, leave my love in the past.
Odin is calling.
Shed a tear for the last, eat my meal for the last,
clean my sword for the last, drop the ore for the last.
Odin is calling.
Jump the ore rush the land, grab a sword in my hand,
Raise it high, scream a cry, see the pain in my eye,
Bring it down, all around, heart beats fast at the sound.
Odin is calling.
Drop my sword, raise my shield, charge my horse cross the field,
Never yield, cant be healed, flesh is burning and pealed,
Odin is calling
Watch blood gush from my wound, my lifes ended to soon,
Odins call is a croon, my chest plate starts to bloom,
does it end in a boom, my fates sealed in with doom.
Odin is calling.
My eyelid is falling, my weakness is appaling,
My heart does stutter, its stalling,
For it knows, it can hear, that
Odin is calling.
Author notes
Amon Amarth inspired. Non-revised. i never do.
I had a poem written and nearly finished but my comp shut off on me so sorry if this sucks but i just cant get as influenced. Oh, and the title is also inspired from another Amon Amarth song.Be critical or not, i'd prefer a mix.
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Love the use of repitition in this piece, it works very well, also love the way the story builds to the ending, which has a bleak feeling, which also works very well.
Not too keen on the background, but other than that, excellent.
Good write and congrats on gold.
(Sorry for the delay in comment)
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I coult tell right away that iw was inspired by Amon Amarth. You took some their style along with the theme. It sound more like a song, to me than a poem, but there's nothing wrong with that. Good write.
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thanks a bunch. Amon Amarth was deffinently a great inspiration. i couldnt help making the poem sound a bit like lyrics. thats just how it came out while i was listening to the song
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I like how the last word in each stanza all rhyme.
Most people that attempt that it seems forced, but this one doesnt.
great write. good luck
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Ahh forgot to mention, its option #19.
i would change the AN but im kinda new and not sure how. srry judge -
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you can go to the poem and on the right it says edit.
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This is great. The flow is perfect and so are the details. I don't know why but I really love this write. Great job and keep on writing!!!
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