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[ breathe, as the water sufficates your lungs. ]

breathe, as the water sufficates your lungs.
there can only be so many tears.

I hate what is going on around
I hate the crowd,


there you found
my body, where i drowned,
the sound of whispers surrounds.

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  • Maybe.I.Am.Broken.
    July 30
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    Left me Speachless...

    wow, this is an amazing write. The ending leaves the reader with so much to think about, much to ponder. Great flow, great imagery, great write. It takes the reader through the object's eyes, simply...an amazing write.

    Keep it up,
    Annie Shadows
    (PS, yes I know I've already commented on this)


  • This Is My Story
    May 15
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    I really like how this poem flows. Good job!


  • higherlove
    May 7
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    i liked this one its really good!!!


  • Maybe.I.Am.Broken.
    May 7

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    I liked the rhythm in this piece.
    It's really good.
    You had amazing imagery.
    Keep writing,
    Annie Shadows