As the snow falls gently to the ground
It reminds me of just how beautiful you are
Your beauty which revivals an angels
You’re so pure and lovely I forget you are human
Your voice so beautiful I could just listen to you speak
And I think I am listening to an angel
Your face so pure it is like something out of a fair book tale
You freed me from myself; you are the one that saved me from the darkness
You’re the most beautiful women I have seen or will ever see
When you first looked at me I thought you were not of this world
For such beauty does not exist
When the first words came from your lovely lips
I thought I was in heaven
I did not want to hear anyone or anything else
I just wanted to stay by your side for eternity
As the snow falls all I can remember is the good times we had
And the laughs we laughed
I want those times to stay and never fade
I am happy that god has given me
The chance to even be in your presence
If there is one thing I am sure in this world is the love I feel for you
Your heavenly voice makes me melt like ice to water
Your lovely eyes capture me in there gaze
For they are the most beauty I have seen in all my life
Your gorgeous hair that waves in the wind freely
What I feel can only be expressed in one phrase
I love you with all my heart; I would do anything to be with you
Even when the snow is slowly stopping your beauty will stay with me for an eternity
Author notes
This is a poem that i dedicated to my one and only love!!
K i r a 6 5
A contest entry
- Point A to B by AkitoTae.
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Silver trophy winner
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As the snow falls all I can remember is the good times we had
And the laughs we laughed
I want those times to stay and never fade
I am happy that god has given me
The chance to even be in your presence
If there is one thing I am sure in this world is the love I feel for you
beautiful imagery.
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Very lovely write!
Fantastic imagery and flow throughout this piece. Great job with the emotions here as well.
Bravo
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Eh it's about love..
.. But it is very good. It has alot of emotion and it shows you clearly notice this girl very well. Obviously you feel for her and you are there for her when she will need you. Good job conveying this. I hope things work out well for you two and it doesn't end up fucked up like it usually does. Who knows maybe hope is out there. But anyways Great write. Good job 
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yeah this poem is old and the love is dead, but like i say
"love comes and goes as the wind blows"
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This poem is very good. It shows you've got alot of emotion for your love, i hope you two are still like this. It's very sweet.
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well we are not but love comes and goes as the wind blows until you find the one
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very true. well, either way that poem was lovely.
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First stanza, fourth line it should be "You're". I liked the third line in the first stanza, what beauty that must be
I think this is a bit cliche, yet, I can feel emotion out of it. The imagery you used for this person was quite nice, and it leaves a nice, lasting image. Great job and good luck in the contest.
Josh
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This is in too many contests for mine, so I'm not going to read it. Sorry.
Congrats on the silver and honorable mention though
and good luck in your other contests.
New plague
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Thanks for entering && Good luck
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you deserve more
cute and really touchy
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well thank you for the comment and i don't think it is that good! I wrote it from the heart like all my poems!
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judge's comment
although for myself it was a little on the long run, i did enjoy reading this. you wrote with pure emotions keeping me reading until the end. thank you for entering and good luck. -
What an amazing write!
I can really, really feel that this was written from pure emotions, and the way you have conveyed your emotions are amazing!
Well done! (:
GreenDragon
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The reason why you can really, really feel that this was written from pure emotions, is because it really was written with pure emotions
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A beautiful write; I can feel the emotion pouring out of this piece
Thankyou so much for entering this piece in my contest, and I wish you the best of luck!
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loved the line "like ice to water" perfect line to use
such a lovely poem feel of meaning and love and emotion. over all a gret write
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really good theres so much emotion and truth in it!!! its truly beautifull!!!!!!!!!
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It is something that i wrote from the heart and will never be able to write like this again!
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its still really good!!!!!!!
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I nod my head to you sir.
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Yes.
I like this. :] Though, there are some spelling errors. Nothing major. Just some "your"s that should be "you're". I also think the format could have been a bit more together and flowed better. But overall, great poem. It's beautiful. (:
Thank you for entering♥
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aww. well i hope you show your love this one bc it is beautiful. it has amazing imagery and nice flow
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Yeah i did and lets just say i am one of those unlucky people that will never know what it is to be loved! i have always had bad luck and that will never end!
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Wow, this is a very captivating poem.
There's not much to say, just wow. Good luck in the contest! ^_^
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Cute!!
Kawaii!! This is so cute! I love it! Good job! Again I worship your skills!
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I am not that good to be worshiped!! i am a not that bad writer but it am not great at all!! -
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To bad! I am going to worship you anyway even if you don't like it. Lol So there! Lol -worship worship worship- Lol
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how have you been freed from yourself?
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I kinda have two personalities, it is a long story with a dark past but lets just say the person who i am talking about in this poem did free me and i love them with all my heart and soul!!
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