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in hollows
a pale light flickers
folding
around a soft dark
a single lily rests
askew
while a remnant blue
moon recedes
curling down
curves
each making the other
more beautiful
~~~
A contest entry
- three colours blue by Nicolette.
1500 points, ended May 16, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I like the feel of this poem. Despite the pale aubergine background, this poem speaks of blue to me (not just the "blue moon"). Is S2 really supposed to be an S2 & S3? If not, that would be my only complaint as there is natural break between the second & third lines. Lovely..
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you are always a breath of real air Jim ... i love your visits thank you ... i am confused about S2 and S3 .. cant really figure out what you are asking ... care to repeat that with a bit more splanation ? sorry having a blonde moment which for a redhead is really peeving coz at least the blonde has an excuse !
oh ...i see. that '
while a remnant blue
moon recedes"
belongs to the same stanza as
folding
around a soft dark
a single lily rests
askew
the remnant blue
moon recedes
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.... you are seeing pale aubergine ? whatever that is ... i see dark blue ... of course i am on a mac and we all know macs are right ...
thanks, always >>> Gina
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i like the way the title seems to flow into the first line but also how both of them stand apart, depending on the way the readers looks at it. there is a lovely serenity about this poem and the imagery is soft and dark blue... made me think of a summer's night in the southern hemisphere. the observation in the final two lines is really good and makes the reader's eyes drift ... a very lovely and elegant penning, gina. good to see you in one of my contest again!! you should definitely write more...
~ Nicolette
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thank you so much ...
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As always, powerful & beautiful words with such profound meanings, Gina. Good luck in Nic's contest. 
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it's why we sleep, i think; to obtain a bit of respite from the overwhelming beauty that is everywhere.
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love the title
this is a beautiful poem
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I like the title of this poem. It is always a pleasure to read your poety and it seems like it has been too long.
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this is familiar to me. i am sure i've read a similar theme and two last lines in another poem by you before, about a vase or something. i love the lily folding around a soft dark.
gorgeous.
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you are so right Tara ... i have been going over my old poems and reworking /discarding and looking at improving them if i can ... the theme is one that is always with me ... thank you so much for stopping by and letting me know ! >>>Gina
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your words speak with serenity...beautiful penning
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thank you Jersene - i am happy that feeling comes through >>>Gina
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i think so too, yes the world can wait and probably even come to a full-stop. simple, elegant much like those penned by the contest sponsor.
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thank you Steve ... i am drawn to the theme and the sponsor's poetry ways .. >>> Gina
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