Since I can't be there to speak face to face,
I've poured my heart through pen and sent this in my place.
I've never been good at knowing the right things to say.
So I'm writing this hoping I manage to find a way.
I wish I could say something to ease your pain,
But all the usual "sorrys" seem so generic and lame.
They sound as if they don't come from the heart,
And that's not me no matter how far we've grown apart.
From day one I've had open arms offering strength to face your fears,
And a gentle hand to wipe away your tears.
That aint changed during these last few years.
Yeah I still truly care Miss Jamie L DeMott.
Even though this time has changed us both a lot.
I'm still a Soldier whose heart is real and true,
And I got something I want to tell you.
Jamie-girl, try to keep your head up;
And know that I do give a "Flying fuck".
Remember that if you ever want to give up.
Don't get me wrong,
Jamie I know you're strong;
And I know you have the heart of a Soldier,
But you don't have to carry the world on your shoulders.
Everyone needs a hand from time to time,
And I want you to know I'm offering mine.
If you don't want it; I'll understand,
But if you do just grab my hand.
I'm not saying you can't handle it on your own.
I'm only saying you don't have to face it alone.
If you ever feel like you just can't make it through;
Remember this next line and know that it's true.
No matter what.....Jamie I got you.
Nothing I could say would make you feel any better,
But that's not the purpose of this here letter.
The purpose is to let you know that I'm here,
If you ever need to talk, yell, or shed a tear.
Jamie..831, I always have and always will.
Real talk is that's unchanged still.
So please know that I do care,
And that I Aint Went Nowhere.
A contest entry
- So Many Thoughts Stirring In My Head by Rashida.
550 points, ended May 6, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lets see what Ya got by Deceits Tears.
900 points, ended May 8, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Kudos to you this was GREAT !!!
I loved the entire piece and cannot choose just one stanza or line
Thankyou for your entry
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I'm touched
I am glad that you liked my entry. Thank you for your kind words and support. I hope that in the future I will be able to further you're reading pleasure.
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I enjoyed the flow of your piece, I didn't feel that the rhyming was forced at all, a major bonus, and I kinda like the diction used, it really helped settle a picture in my mind. Excellent work.
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i got a real kick outta this. the words feel like they're straight from the gut, the message of faith and support is strong... patience too.
my poetry doesn't rhyme. i seldom think in rhyme and when i do it's pretty ugly lol. i can enjoy this type of rhyme tho cause it has the feel of lyrics. sometimes lyrics/poetry sound better than they read just like your poem did, for me anyway.
pretty good job on this. keep on writin'
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