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{{SCREAM}} me a L*O*V*E song...

[[SCREAM]]
together f-o-r-e-v-e-r?
l.i.s.t.e.n.i.n.g to you *HeArT* beat
[showing] i c..a..r..e...
babyyy i N-E-E-D you

Lets *FoRgEt* about what "People" say
there [[lies]] are all *jealousy*
they d-o-n-t have what WE have babyyy...

[Our] s.t.e.a.m.y life
baby, [we] make each other {{SCREAM}}
its J*E*A*L*O*U*S*Y...
just [laugh] ^_^

why dont you {{scream}} me a L*O*V*E song?
make "them" {{CRY}} with h-o-r-r-o-r...
*Giggle*

holding a [knife] to my thought
me with a S*M*I*L*E on my [[face]]
"they" look S-h-o-c-k-e-d
Hehehe
isnt this {{{FuN}}}

there all [scared]
Hehehe
WE are having the [time] of OUR L*I*V*E*S
its {{{GREAT}}}
^__^

Author notes

this is acually a true story, me and my boyfriend scared a bunch of random people, he screamed me a love song, then held a knife to my though, and i was still smiling it was a joke, but everyone was scared, it was sooooo funny, hehehe... ok, ok, i no, we are both wierd, but we had a funny day that day hahahaha ^__^ anyways, tell me what you think, please and thank you

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  • Jaffa-
    May 10

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    I really really liked this. Sounds like you had a really great time. The looks on there faces must have been real funny
    I really like how you've portrayed your day in this poem it's a really good write. Thanks for sharing ^^
    Well done, keep writing. xo


  • Antebellum
    May 8
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    "holding a [knife] to my thought
    me with a S*M*I*L*E on my [[face]]
    "they" look S-h-o-c-k-e-d
    Hehehe
    isnt this {{{FuN}}}"

    I loved these lines.
    lol I have a poem called scream me a love song, sing me the chorus.

    hah yeah just thought Id throw that out there