STOP!
let me get it out
can't you see what is going on?
I need to release this pressure
building and piling
weight pushing and pulling
I feel so alone
yet surround by so many
hot bodies press up against me
and I am on the floor
getting stepped on
silver cyanide dosed syringes
plague my mortal abyss
and douse me in Hell's fire
as I drown in Heaven's glare
I'm fucked.
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Wow, this has some great emotions in it, I'm amazed(:. I love these lines; "I feel so alone
yet surround by so many
hot bodies press up against me
and I am on the floor
getting stepped on" && also the ending. Great write;
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very good poem
i love it
it made me think about what was going
on i mean i can see the girl
girl getting raped the flames of hell
i mean you know she under and everything
is burning up around her and
she wants out of the hell phool is was in
and i am in shocked by this poem
short and sweet and nice -
Powerful piece of writing here. Full of emotion and passion within the words. Do I sense anger too, and sadness. You have caught your feelings and emotions well within this piece. Keep writing.
Dark Wishes
Wayne Leon
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well well
seems i should have jumped on this bandwagon sooner what a poet you are ... at least in this grusomely delicious write
"douse me in Hell's fire
as I drown in Heaven's glare"
this line punched my emotions hard and and took my breath away .. the whole write did this tho
~teddybare~
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Powerful!
Chrissy I can actually identify with these words. They are painful, sad, full of hurt, and emotional. You have written a very powerful blockbuster rolling at a fast speed down the hill. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love & hugs,
Barbara
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this poem is very.....sensual... i like it
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Perhaps you mean: Phantasmic - pertaining to or of the nature of a phantasm; unreal; illusory; spectral:
This is quite a venting of agressive anger at what is being done to you.
surrounded by so many hot bodies 'pressing' ? (It is easy to get walked on in the masses when our opinions differ and we feel we have no power)
However, it is never too late to take a stand and pull our lives together.
A good rant. ~The Blue Lamp
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