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Awaken

Black holes cannot be such

without the infinite wisdom of light
shining upon bleak dreariness

illuminating the crippling
dank dust of despair

like a feather caressing the skin

without the perception of touch.

Ignominious shadows

cast upon those
purest of heart,

emoting the feelings of labels

rather then shining
on with true intent.

 Forgo mirrors of wanton eyes,

dismember the punching fists of the soul,

relish unto thee with the spectacles
of honesty achieved only

from the renaissance of innocence.
Shedding societal layers

that muddies conceptions

and earnestly encounter the origin

 of one.

Reach back into the hole,

the beginning
of feeling,

the freshness of life,

feeling sensations alive

for the first time.

 When simplicity of sensations

rushed over the senses

like an awakening of awe.

 Appreciating comes from fulfillment

or ease of a suffering.

Happiness comes from tasting struggles,

knowing sadness and fully

grasping contentment.

Idleness robs the human experience

of tasting mother Earth's

delectable menu of passion.

Embody this spirit and darkness

will only be a necessity of happiness

not a permanent dweller.

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  • the language used in this poem is astounding, thank you for entering and good luck in the contets.

    "Forgo mirrors of wanton eyes,

    dismember the punching fists of the soul,

    relish unto thee with the spectacles
    of honesty achieved only

    from the renaissance of innocence."

  • So deserving of that silver trophy this piece is, I really enjoyed the atmosphere you set and the medieval feel I got from this poem.

    "shining upon bleak dreariness
    illuminating the crippling
    dank dust of despair"

    Now there are some sweet lines of poetry.

    Thanks for sharing this.

  • good, sure worth a thot.

  • A great write

  • "renaissance of innocence"....
    I really dig that blue.
    Most of what I've read by you has been your deeply gruesome rhymes, which of course I love, but I also really like this side of you. Good flow here, as well as emotional content.


  • PurpleSky
    May 6

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    This was a lovely write that seemed to flow well and had some great imagry in it. I could see everything as you wrote it out. I see you got a silver up there so congrats on that and thanks for featuring it for those lucky enough to read it!
    huggles
    Lena

  • way to write!
    favorite verses:

    Happiness comes from tasting struggles,
    knowing sadness and fully
    grasping contentment.

    Idleness robs the human experience
    tasting mother Earth's
    menu of delectable passions.
    (smooths the flow)

    To embody this spirit and darkness
    will only be a necessity
    of happiness
    not a permanent dweller.

    That was lovely!
    pearls of wise wise truths.
    thanks for the fine jewelry in this poem!

    ears/Seattle
    way to write!
    very inspiring!


  • Junkyard
    May 5
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    very good poem enjoyed it

  • Thank you for entering my contest. This poem is well done. It describes the need of both fully. Good luck.


  • tomisb
    May 5

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    Often we get lost in knowing whether our explanation makes sense, so we try to explain more and fall deeper into nonsense.

    You start with an opening that intrigues, tantilizes and promises all in the same short breath.

    Perhaps a word or line could be left behind but there are not so many that they confuse those who peruse. In the end where the reader is brought back to land you part by sharing the Light in the soul, you were so bold to praise and raise before them.

    Nicely done. Quite a leap of faith, both artistically and intimately.

    Love,
    Tom B.

  • Eusebius
    May 5

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    Ah, interesting, intriguing, arcane piece to, I believe, shock us out of our current insensate path, whatever that may be and turn to something--other... ambitions and most adriotly done!

  • Macsword
    May 5

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    My Goodness Blue...

    Excellent write...but this,

    "Happiness comes from tasting struggles,

    knowing sadness and fully

    grasping contentment."

    Is a great thought well penned. Good stuff Poet.

  • very good, very moving

  • Wow.. BLUE I LOVE IT
    You have a message in your words
    Excellent flow and imagery
    Thanks for another brillant share
    Darky

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