All Consuming Darkness
Enter the dark dreary world that is on this side of the line.
With each step you find your heart darkens.
Your breath…it fills the lungs, find its way to the blood, and
vile thoughts course through your veins into the brain.
The creeping sensation crawling up the back of you neck enters the base of your skull,
and you learn this is no feeling a shudder can rid you of.
Greater tension is felt off of the fist that is tightening its hold on you.
The pressure only intensifies until the moment of acceptation is there,
take it within and you are free from the confines of morals.
Expel all the good, the light, in you and it will flee to the other side for it can not survive here.
Envelop yourself in it and you will be consumed.
Soon there will be nothing of you left only the intensity of the one extreme.
The Golden Mean
The great divide is void of love and hatred, there is no Joy or sorrow here in the mean.
This is perfection in the only form it can take.
The Path, however is a razor’s edge, no man can hope to walk it.
This middle ground is not a path that any man can pursue, for it he does it is not The Path.
There is no error nor are there 9faults to this line, yet there are no higher standards either.
There is no frenzied motion here, no, there is only calm perfection that can not be altered.
All Ever-Increasing Light
Cross the middle and float to the bright shining light of that side of the line.
Let it fill your heart till light sprouts from your fingertips.
Your breath… is easier here, for when the cavity is emptied
expelled is that much more of the darkness inside being relieved.
The light is calm, free, now the only thing to be seen of darkness is a thin line on the horizon.
Feel the body separate for the joy can not be held within, the cool line of clear water falling from the eyes as another product of light that can not be contained.
All sensation is accepted readily, the emotions of the light held close only by the wish that they stay.
No pulse is felt in the body; one heart beat flows into the other.
Taken is the flesh from bone nothing left but room for the soul to expand
Free from the confines that kept the light from entrance your spirit takes all and extends
Nothing is left of what once was, only the collective whole of the one extreme.
Author notes
Words of my insperation: It is said in the Book of Poetry, "The hawk flies up to heaven; the fishes leap in the deep." This expresses how this way is seen above and below.
Contrast isn't always about light and dark, but this is what worked best for me.
I don't feel like readers can really get "into" this poem, but maybe that just me being too critical of myself. If anyone has a suggestion or constructive criticism bring it on, I'll be happy to read it.
A contest entry
- Darkness and Light by guardian warrior.
550 points, ended May 5, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i liked your poem
Are you kidding me this poem is really good and I see a lot of wisdom put into it along with the feelings that came with it to me what I got out of it was that life is really meaningless unless you have something that you believe in. You pointed out clearly in a joy that follows after death. I see your poem spiritually and I think you are too critical of your work . Your poem has a light side and a dark side also, that the war we are in is a spiritual warfare. I thought your poem was really good and I am not saying this to be nice to you . Great Job and hope to see more!
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Thank you for your comment. I am happy to see that you enjoyed reading it!
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I must be honest this is more like three seperate poems that are simply put one right after the other. I believe that you should express the reality of the three exsisting together. They are the extremes of everything. Perfect dark, nuetral, and light. You must show how in truth they are the three sides to an ever spinning top. The lines always blurred. We are a chaotic mix of all. Because they feel so seperate I can not say that this expresses the balance that I was looking for in my prompt. This is not to say that I did not enjoy the read. It was very good. But as I said I feel that it is missing its final cohesive part. Thank you for sharing it.
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No, you're right it didn't really fit the contests all that well.
But your pompt did inspire the idea, and that's all I'm here for. Thanks.
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