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I love the sound when you come undone

When I'm the one pulling at your strings
Slowly pulling away the sweater of your heart
Vicious touches to a soul bore open
Open for the world to gape at

I love the sound when you come undone

Sweet black noise in the background of your tears
I'll thrive in the mess of you
Peeling apart every piece to be analyzed
I hunger, crave, desire, the fruit of your heart

I love the sound when you come undone

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"I love the sound when you come undone." FMLYHM
EmoAngel

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  • corrupt angel
    May 4

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    Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. First off, I'm thrilled someone used "FMLYHM," as I just adore it so much.

    "Slowly pulling away the sweater of your heart."

    Perfection! Lovely imagery. Great write and thanks for entering. Best of luck!