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High and Low

Caviar tastes with champagne dreams.

Breathless words for deaf boys.


Reaching out just to get your hand~
~slapped~
He says clever poignant words


SO.....He's amazing?


I am the villain because I know what I want.
He is courageous, why?


Yes.I remember now.


Because he said goodbye
And meant it.

A contest entry

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  • Lowell Poe
    July 30
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    This is very cool lass...
    i like that it feels like a thought.

    Liam

  • RottenSubject204
    June 29
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    kind of short for words. incredible.
    ur line * breathless words for deaf boys*
    Amazing.


  • mysticstorm gold member
    June 28

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    You are brilliant! I love all you strong closing lines...this is very creative and nicely done...

    Best to you in the contest!

    mystic


  • Rheea gold member
    June 3

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    That's ok you hold out for what is real for you..wait everything we write is not personal oh ..this is one of those that make it sound so very real. great I want to read more of you.


  • HerIcyIronicWords..
    June 3
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    stunning!!


  • glenn shannon silver member
    May 27
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    great take on prompt love this is tasty and brave

  • joe25
    May 26
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    Delectable

    Taste buds stung, and my head spun... love great writing and loved the. Thank you.


  • redmoonnrizing silver member
    May 23
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    This is so very beautiful...Thanks for sharing


  • Draig aine gold member
    May 22

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    very cool write

    this is a well done piece, the first lines are killer!!

    Caviar tastes with champagne dreams.
    Breathless words for deaf boys

    look forward to reading more of your work.


  • HerIcyIronicWords..
    May 22
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    wow you have a very good choice of words! It's quite moving


  • Keith Drew gold member
    May 5
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    Your beauty is your ace card, and the conversation over the table in the restaurant is all about you.
    Even though it may not seem that way.
    Just the light in your eyes and the wine makes him want to taste your special.
    Do not deceive yourself beautiful lady, all any man wants is you.


  • Ademon
    May 5

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    you've expressed beautiful imagery in this piece it's great! I do wish you the best in Grace's contest. You've done very well.


  • white stone
    May 4

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    I liked the flow of this, it rings of clever bitterness. Short and to the point, something I am becoming more and more a fan of recently.


    • Phallen
      May 4
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      thank you silly man! recently a fan? you love me! you really really love me! see I am funny to.


  • sweet arrival gold member
    May 4

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    that ending is nice and strong. sometimes that takes alot of courage to up and leave, but then again, it takes courage to go after what you want too. nice title, fitting with your words very well. i like this. thanks for the entry.


  • Matt E. Smith
    May 4
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    your writing is improving a lot. good job with this one. best ofluck in the contest

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