It reaps
in the hollow night
while death hums impatience
of a chaotic larceny
scowling
meshing in thighotic aches
numb to reverberating
hard-ons
tracing meticulous bias
possessed within sedated anguish
threshing
throbbing
cannibalistically pulsating
a gasp of aramaic gibberish fling
splayed yonder purgation
incarcerated
in serpentine voracity
the grim reaper is aroused
spasming tongue
licking innocence
from the abyss
of morbid gehenna
up the exiguous
silkened path
of thigh-dripping felicity
death smiles
upon his obsequious hymn
stripped
tamed
yielding bleeding orgasms
his demeaning justice
served in perpetuity.
Author notes
Y O T T A
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Contest "Word Bank"
larceny, meticulous, derisive, nautical, prive, absolution, cargo, phenomenal, flank, lashing, splayed, voracity!
And Quote by Jim Morrison
"I touched her thigh, and Death smiled"
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- May the Sound of Creation Be Deafening by lunarlunacy.
1400 points, ended May 11, 10 entries
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Comments
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you have a meticulous ken for death, don't you dearie.
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you got some serious i mean serious word usage in this poem. i had to get my dictionary out. actually thats my first time having to do that. but nonetheless. the poem is MAGNIFICENT! very creative imagery.
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Amazing profile!
Marhaba!
I appreciate your comment on my poem.
I also loved your creativity and talent.TX
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I love how the visual form of the poem echoes the sinuous curves of the prompt in both form and description. Your extensive vocabulary breathed an aroma of sinuous lust into the piece—I applaud your creativity, originality, and bravery to go outside the box and over a cliff.
Thank you for sharing; I enjoyed the read.
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Outstanding
Jim Morrison is one of my favourite writers and I liked this take on his quote. I liked the way you broke this up into fragments which reinforced the language you used so that it almost jumped out of the page at you. I thought this was original and compellingto read. I also liked the etended metaphor for death/love which had a lot of impact. Best of luck in the contest.
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wow....amazing.
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still smokin hot!
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This was dark and profound... I'll use a dictionary later, hehe.
I loved your usage of words, but I didn't understand some of them. Which is good, you used words I didn't know, that's hard to do, seeing as how I'm a word freak.
I loved your format, and your photo. They blend so well with your background.
You impress me.
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First, cool picture
At first I actually thought it a flower...
A great use of diction here, marvelous metaphors and terrific imagery. Nice use of the word bank
I do not, however, know of 'thighotic'... a play on 'thiotic acid' perhaps?
Your format is a little chopy, not bad, just unrestrained... An artist such as yourself could certainly tighten it up.
All in all I liked it very much, thank you for sharing
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wow.....very well done! Man the words here...lol..very well done! Very creative!
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Wow, very impressive, nice display and take on the prompt. Well, done.
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nice.
very creative...dont think ive read anything like this before lol.
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damn nice verbage gal, but bleeding orgasms.... OUCH, that redefines the phrase "hurts so good". so glad to see ya come out for this one, thanks for entering.
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