take a breath
live your life
dont it sound so simple
but when your pressured
by existence
you cant move off the wall
your pinned there forever
untill finally
the pin is taken out
and you fall to the ground
your bones break
but you cant make a sound
they've taken your voice
taken your voice
your being pressured
by existance once more
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- darkside by emoempess.
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This is symbolic to the pressures we all face in life, good job. Best of luck in the contest.
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I like it all except line three. I think it would sound better with "doesn't"
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it kinda makes off a song and thats what it sounds like in the song
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Good and emotional. Did you mean "break" not "brake"?
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yah oops read my other new ones that youhavnt commented on
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woah liv i love the new pic.
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