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Eternity

Artisan of the heart
Precision at its finest
Captivating, enchanting, graceful
Lay thy self down and wrap me in your love
Never let me go
When all the world falls silent
And the last breath is taken
The stars shine below
I am yours for eternity

♥

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  • loving
    2 days ago
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    nice and simple. well done!!

  • Eusebius
    October 16
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    Short but pithy and very deftly done poem, highly lyrical for such a piece... I liked this verse a great deal!!!


  • Andi.
    July 18
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    ♥


  • Bright Lights
    July 13
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    Good stuff, good stuff
    I really liked it.


  • AwesomeJoshsome
    July 7

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    aww your so sweet I enjoy love poems cause I'm a big softy and, it's a much needed break from all the emo nonsense
    "Never let me go" - an undying need to be with the one you love and that's a purty thing!


  • Vickie Rosa
    June 26
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    EXQUISITE PIECE

    This was wonderful an amazing write. you are poetry my friend sheer beauty. Many blessings to you


  • whoudini
    June 24

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    This was first time reading your poems and very impressed.

    Could feel the emotion when I read this and your words you used were chosen very thoughtful. I felt right away this was going to be very good when read the first words " Artisan of the heart" very powerful and wow! what you can relay with just a few well place words , thanks and was very nicely done, now I know I have to read more of your works .


  • EbonyQueen48
    June 15

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    short but very nicely written, you words have meaning and so that makes this a wonderful write, thanks for sharing

  • writerintoodeep
    June 12

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    This is such an amazing poem!!! I can feel your soul through your writing. So keep writing! Great job!


  • Rejected Easter Egg
    June 11

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    This is really good, Simple yet very provoking. One comment on many

  • Zarokk666
    June 8

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    eternal love
    a favorite subject of many poets it seems
    including myself

    " When all the world falls silent
    And the last breath is taken"

    love those lines

    keep penning, keep dreaming
    Zarokk666


  • Sentimentalpoet
    May 30
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    lovely

    Its a great poem. i love it. great job.


  • Sophles
    May 20
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    This is so short, and simple, but it really cuts through and makes you feel. you are really artistic with the simplicity of it.


  • Mrs. Mautino
    May 16

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    I can imagine this small note written in bleeding ink with hearts drawn around it (but not the crappy and cheesy kind). It's very sweet, yet passionate, and easy to grasp. I'm happy for you, Kels


  • AshlEEshAnnOn
    May 15
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    I..I...WOOOOOOOW!!

    ¡Adio MIos!!! dang girl....!!


  • Fulabeans
    May 5

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    Amazing!

    It is very very well written and it makes me feel so lucky that I am the one you love (That's right people, be jealous) aaannyways.

    This is a great piece, Kellena emotion, passion, and imagery. It;s all there and well put together great write.

    well done,
    -Dustin-


  • Wolfdog silver member
    May 4

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    Excellent

    'tis a fine write, indeed. You expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.


  • redbarchettadrive gold member
    May 4

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    Kellena,
    this evokes many emotions as I read & re-read your work here.
    Reminds me of a knight coming for his princess, he holds her and the whole world falls away. What an awesome visual that is all on its own, but then it seems that the two of them in an eternal embrace seem to be above the stars in their own magical place together. The promise of eternity is something that people on earth seem to take more and more for granted each and every day, ya know it? Though, your line captivated my attention when I read, "The stars shine below", my mind thought, "Wow!!" She is UP above the stars. I always read the stars above, not you above the stars. This is super writing Kellena. Did I mention that I liked it?

  • Jason-R-Britt
    May 4
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    Romantically short and sweet. Nice job.


  • hollowriver
    May 4
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    wow
    fantastic


  • Cyanide Dreams
    May 4

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    Whoa, this is deep. I really liked the flow of this piece and how well the emotions go with the "scene". I do think that the heart at the bottom, even though I find it cute, isn't very effectful with this piece. Great job Keleptico.

    Joshy


  • Fox.
    May 4
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    now this is poetry.

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