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~She Dreamed in Color

She was a Nova Scotia drifter drifting,

she is probably dreaming dreams in color.


She drank the strongest black coffee

from a slim silver bullet mug. A total eclipse of the sun

had emptied the sky.


Planes and kites fell.


She liked to look,

raising her hand to her eye.

 

As she continued down the road,

she slipped the ring around the sun

on her middle finger.

 

Her cinnamon skin appeared as leather,

while her eyes turned to wax.

She viewed her vision as fortune,

her castle, the earth.

 

Then the rain began to fall

extinguishing her sun.

As soon as her sadness settled,

the arc of a rainbow sprang forth like

fresh spring water.

 

Color, like a tapestry flooded her hair,

lighting up her eyes in a frowning world.
She kept walking and she dreamed...

in color.

Author notes

This compilation was created using Carly Simon's "You're So Vain" lyrics and Carole King's "Tapestry" lyrics. I also used my own words too. Try one!

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  • heart shaped box
    September 30
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    very creative.You are very talented and I really love the imagery in this.which you probably here alot.lolgreat job.


  • Hrob329
    July 16
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    Simply beautiful. I am at a loss for words. ♥


  • Daizee silver member
    June 15

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    Incredibly original. You take the reader on such an emotional journey through this. Loved the last line

    Love,
    Stacy


  • kira1115
    June 13

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    Beautiful, amazing, brilliant, should I go on? Nah it would take up to much space. I loved this so much. I loved the last two stanzas the most. Keep on writing,
    Kira1115 and Hihamburger


  • Katilina
    May 6

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    ...she dreams in color, a kalidascope of lies...

    Being a drifter is hard.

    I really enjoyed your poem. I like your concrete and abstract images of the girl. I wonder the spearers relation to her. pen on poet!


  • maralisa silver member
    May 4
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    aw a wonderful write thank you for sharingmaralisa

  • Very nice! I laughed about the silver mug while looking over at your avatar...

    The abstracts in this are very approachable, which is a good thing on a Monday morning!

    • He's just that way when he gets too much caffeine! lol I need to inject the word bullet in there somewhere, eh?
      Thanks GM!

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