Made friends with a hyacinth Macaw
this afternoon in a pet store.
Golden feathers over the heart,
and deep, blue as the ocean wings.
It talked to me in low gurgles
that I could mimic and speak back.
It stretched out and gripped
my shirt in its beak to pull me close.
I offered my arm,
and she stepped out; head tilted,
green eyes
warily watching my weathered face.
We both had a little trouble trusting
Her claws bit into my arm;
I tried to remember
she was afraid of falling and
only wanted something
permanent to hold on to...
But it still hurt
She took my fingers in her beak
Her only way of touching
Eyes enjoying my caresses
Chin lifted for me
to pick off leftovers
While I chanted back to her
Hello. Hello. Hello...
Be at Peace
You will always
Be beautiful
to me...
Author notes
By Your Side- Tenth Avenue North
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=J95rAr0gOFU&feature=related
A contest entry
- Invite Only ...My Groups: Feathers & Hope by poet2angels.
800 points, ended May 7, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very Lovely
I made the connection through your writing, now I have seen this hyacinth Macaw. Beautifully written.
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Beautiful
You described this so beautifuly.
I felt so much warmth,understanding,love,various emotions.
Good luck in this contest.
I had beautiful Macaw from Brazil,who actualy talked,he died of old age after something like 35years,either that or the constant sea breeze wasn't good for him.
Lol,he used to crack me up!
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good choice of title and also, very good that your words take the reader far away from the simple theme of a pet store. your use of description and imagery is great. maybe you should consider revising the format in which you have separated the lines so that it makes it flow more easily, it seems choppy in the way that it is put together.
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what a story teller. it is hard to balance story telly and poetry, sometimes they get lost in each other...well regardless wonderful job
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Great imagery and narrative...I pretty much agree with bonjourbunnie all the way =)
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I love the imagery and the soft and subtle way with which it is included. I don't read narrative style poems very often, but this one sticks and is easy to read. I love the undertone of understanding, of compassion. It's a message that is delivered with a little extra on top - a great write, thanks for sharing.
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You explore trust, and greeting, recognising other life as yourself, quite lovely.
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my husband has two cockatiels who seem to hate me so this write made me a bit envious of your newfound friendship. thank you for sharing this with me today and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the very near future. i wish you the best of luck in this contest that you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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A very interesting poem.
We both had a little trouble trusting
I think that line is very clever. I can't detect a hidden meaning, but even if there isn't it's a good poem.
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absolutely wonderful, anyone who can write a poem about a beautiful experience such as this is truly blessed
GREAT JOB!!
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I couldn't tell if this had some kind of hidden meaning, like commitment issues, or if it was really just about a bird.
I really like the lines referring to the bird digging it's claws into your arms, and you remembering that even though it hurt, you knew that it just needed something permanent to hold onto.
Anyways, nice poem, Crackertl82 -
loved it....wonderful ink and soul you have!
thankyou for sharing this heart warming poem.
flawless in it's flow and imagery!
ears/Seattle
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a good poem, ah my sister has a pet store it appears in her front room, so many animals. i do not have any myself.
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What a magnificent write about a beautiful winged creature ...such imagery dear poet
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There you are lol there you are.
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Ah! You listen and understand so well!
We share this love for nature and especially for our feathered friends ... I loved the word play in the title. Interconnective we are, and yes, needy to be beautiful to those who love us.
And yes, sometimes the grip by those afraid to fall does hurt ...
Love
Myra
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mmmm... you do have a way with words.
Mary Jo
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Lovely poem so well written...!
Very unique and beautiful
Lynda
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A very well expressed and beautifully poetic piece you have inscribed here. Thanks for sharing, all the best!
-Timothy
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