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To Share Gods' Glory

The name of he who most dare not speak,
is the one for which my heart does weep.
I pray for you to know thy name,
upon sacrifice we were delivered from shame.

No glory of man can match what I've seen,
there is not a stone that can hide from him.
I pray for you to receive Gods glory,
I pray that you would know his name.

Nah, it's not obvious at all

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  • Anne Linington
    May 4

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    Good poem

    Heartfelt plea to share the knowledge of God with others
    A couple of suggestions: Line 1 should it be Him rather than he? Not a fan of "my heart DOES weep" when logically it should be "my heart weeps.


  • desertmountainie
    May 3

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    Me Gusta!

    I like it! I only think that some of the 'he's and 'him's should be capitalized. Other than that, great job! I love the spiritual aspect!