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Alone

My heart was filled with wounds
but you stitched me back together

My eyes were filled with tears
but you wiped them all away

Now it is time to part
and we must go our seperate paths

I know its not your fault
but My world feels like its falling apart

Those wounds you healed are created anew
I cry fresh tears upon my pillow

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  • historygeek6190
    May 3
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    wow so deep


  • JaycobKay
    May 3

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    I'm leaving too.
    My friends helped build me, and they fixed me up, for sure...
    But I never really liked them. They helped fix me in the way that I always had to strive to fit in, I always had to fix Myself.

    You must be sadder than I to leave.
    Just think about how when you go to this new place,
    everything that your friends have built you into
    will shine.

    and I agree with PetiteMaverick; the poem wasn't all that good, but has potential. The subject is a good one to keep writing on.


  • petitemaverick
    May 3

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    okay

    I think it has potential. Maybe you could describe some of your friends.like, one friend for each paragraph.

    Tell you what? Listen to 'leaving on a jetplane' and it'll bring the fantastic out of your poem.

    I think it's great to write about leaving because...well, that's life for you. I must admit - writing abt leaving is hard though. What else to say? You're leaving.