Reality of Life (Gold Trophy) by catz at All poetry

I walk through the forest of life

lost in the denseness of its foliage

too old am I to worry of life’s wrath

too young to give in to age

If I could but justify life’s truths

resign myself to the outrageous path

of the betrayed, to creep among souls

and to not feel the aftermath

I have faced life with its rights and wrongs

rejoiced with its pleasures and jest

wept with the blood of the betrayed

and still I forge ahead, hoping for its best

But I know it will never be mine

my sanity suffers this life’s cruel span

its dreams of reality made false

by realities, the useless hopes of man

Dee Garner

Author notes

Option # 1
Words used from word bank:
False
Betrayed
Blood
Wrath
Sanity
Justify

In a list

A contest entry

A New Partners In Crime Contest by Partners In Crime. 1400 points, ended May 7, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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By me, right now

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Ellis
August 11

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Definitely GOLD
Well, we have AllPoetry!

This poem expresses my feels, too -- so well.
Dancing Moonbeam
June 9

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life is nothing more than a beautiful dance from the time we are born till we close our eyes to sleep...never to old to find more to live for i love your words and the haunting feelings they instill...and simply WOW on the GOLD well deserved
individuality
May 13

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ah yes, way too young to give in to age, let age take a leap, all the passions and the tears and the joys and dances that create us, and still, we sigh with it all and accept defeat in the light of humanity's dreams. a good poem.
- catz
  June 9
  
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  I wonder why this comment only shows two stars when I know I gave it five ???
  At any rate, Ian, thank you
Wesley Storer
May 9

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Here's to you
Vanity of vanities saith the preacher. All is vanity. You are not alone. Be as happy as you can. I know you will be, because you are one sweet cookie!
Sagittarius
May 5

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This is so well written, as well as touching and sad. But so true. Life is certainly an eye-opener. Man is so flawed - we need to watch out now where in the not so distant past, in a different world, trust and respect were the watchwords. No longer Dee - you've hit it on the head - sad but your own spirit and youth will see you through. And I'm glad.

Sag
Just4u
May 5

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Life is a nonending battle of wants vs needs. Hopes lauched, some to
succeed, but many to fail. Life is but a reaction to the inevitable pitted
against the power of choice. We can never win the war, but we can have
success in some of the battles before the last final one which we all lose
in the end...

An excellent take of such a small word bank...
Wolf Mistress
May 5

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Oh my goodness..

This is just so very beautiful..and all with just picking a few words from a wordbank?

Only great poets can do such things...
So you're one of them..

I think you can already start to think about options for the new contest Dee

XXJeannette
- Wolf Mistress
  May 7
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  I knew it I knew it...
  
  Congrats Dee...I will be waiting for something good to come..
Meroza
May 5
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This is well written, I like the darkness in your words.

The best of luck
Warrior7
May 4
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This is great Dee, i just read in the comments that this poem isn't personal which to me makes this even better to read, i believe that if someone can write a poem with the given words without it being personal than they are true poet. Like Queen said this piece is outstanding Dee. Oh and the poem is something that most of us can relate with. Thanks for entering and good luck
queen
May 4

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This is outstanding GOod poem Catz good luck in the contest
MargaretG
May 3

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I wondered
and then I looked at the word bank. My poem on these would be just as bleak as yours. The last two lines speak so strongly of disillusionment and despair, I hope it is not personal. A fine poem, Dee!
- catz
  May 3
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  Thank you, Margaret and no, it's not personal, just some stuff the words brought to mind.
thepoetssoul
May 3

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Sublime piece of poetry you have written
So full of energy and poetic truths
Be blessed in all you do.

Tony
wingsofgold25
May 3

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Excellent
Sometimes Wordbanks can be very tough but you have made this one seem so easy.
And you have described what I am sure many can relate to as the Realities of Life.
Good Job .
Good Luck in the Contest
ED.
DeeCrepit
May 3

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You wrote what I have known, and awakened memories better left unvisited--therapeutic perhaps, to see they still annihilate. Need I say it is an excellent poem? Fortunately Time heals, but leaves the scars behind.

I understand the lack of punctuation in view of the psychological realities within, for the emotions can be as undisciplined as the lack of sentence structure, periods and commas, overflowing into everything. Was this an intended, deliberate device? If so, it works.

(Unfortunately too many writers in AP have lost this effect by omitting them for no reason at all.)

Line 2 has a typo. I wish I could spot my own as easily!

Terry
- catz
  May 3
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  Thank you for the comment and critique, Terry Is the misspelled word 'denseness'? I did have it spelled as 'densless' so changed that. Funny thing is, when I put it both ways through spellcheck in my word program, both spellings came up as correct.
  
  And yes, the omitted punctuation was deliberate. I tried using it at the time I composed the poem but for some reason it seemed to take away from the poem. So saying it works as is, especially coming from you, makes it okay to me, too
  
  Dee
Pete Greenslade
May 3
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i love this good luck..wisdom and insecurity combined ..peter