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Sealing Their Promise of Love

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Deep down within me

all emotions runneth wild

As your lips guide mine

into a pool of pure bliss

Your sweet lips fulfilling me

~~

Purest of movements

as tender nibbling sparks

the greatest heatwave

Heartbeats raging, our breath caught

gasping, we get lost in ones eyes

~~

Embraces tighter

we now become one on one

Hovering above

looking down into loves sea

the waves of passion rolls fast

~~

Tongues parting the lips

as bodies burst into flames

Beautiful petals

blossom, a sweet scents released

a special glow lights their face

~~

Inhaling the bliss

as dew drips from heated skin

Their lips again lock

sealing the passion within

sealing their promise of love

Author notes

Prompt: A contest entry for:
YOUR KISS BLOSSOMS WITHIN ME TANKA

Tanka
Tanka is a classic form of Japanese poetry related to the haiku with five unrhymed lines of five,
seven, five, seven, and seven syllables. (5, 7, 5, 7, 7)

The 5/7/5/7/7 rule is rumored to have been made up for school children to understand and learn
this type of poetry. For an in depth description of Haiku, please visit the Shadow Poetry Haiku,
Senryu, and Tanka section.

I done this in a Tanka Chain, 5 Tankas in a row

In a list

A contest entry

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  • Swan song gold member
    May 23

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    a breathtaking chain with a few mispellings and miscount on one syllable but i liked this and you stole my heart you did!


  • Bosiarbooger gold member
    May 3

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    How am I suppose to funtion

    This was hotter than hot, am in a sweat typing. Loves greatest reward each other and to spend it in bliss.... unforgetable... I loved this and felt it when reading. As always you have touched me now what do I do, All my love Rick


  • The Guardian
    May 3
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    Amazing.. i could feel the energy here... keep it up


  • cricketjeff gold member
    May 3

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    Beautifully passionate poetry, do you do any other kind?

    Not my favouritte form by any means but superbly done

    Jeff


  • The Drifter
    May 3
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    A truely sweet, beautiful write that causes the reader to think, then sigh and smile.

  • J Macabre gold member
    May 3

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    That was excellent. I love what the title is saying too. I agree too, this much love should only be between two people......not 3...4...5.


  • maralisa silver member
    May 3

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    aw a wonderful write so full of sensuality and pure passionate feeling throughout good luck in the contestmaralisa


  • geckogirl silver member
    May 3

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    you are one amazing person PP. this is pure passion... good luck


  • Sgt B
    May 3

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    Hot, yet Loving

    very eloquently written,
    Loved the way you wrote this one. Very tastefully done.
    Great job hun!


    These type or forms are very difficult to write. You really showed your talent here.
    Great write
    Good luck in the Contest!!!!!


    ~Ron~

  • Thor-201
    May 3
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    Really beautiful.

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