A knight after battle in
the land of mirrors
Before me stood a dark prince
surveying his realm
Red moon beams streamed
behind him and shimmered
light like a nimbus around his head
Eyes like smoke, very intense,
insubstantial as mist
Cold skin of the palest..
Alluring mystified..
my heart skips a beat,
then quickens
A single purple rose he holds
drawing in it's scent
Fate twisted around me
laying one more trap
Dangerous chemistry
forbidden fruit
in Gardens of a darker Eden
One taste would
satisify
A handful of posies
falling to the ground
bloody corpses lay
between us slain
untainted..
Within that misty space of
time taken, silently I
watch in wait
my gaze he meets
moments held, yet
still no words he speaks
Darkest love, ruler
in the land of mirrors
to satisfy my purest craving
humbly he holds out
that single purple rose
Then in seconds
All alone
I stand in aww
Left to moments fading...
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Darky,
My friend, you are an amazing writer! I love the mirrors and imagery and oh, nothing beats a delectable dark prince. I can picture the whole story unfolding in my head. Very nice write~
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Excellent imagery.
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Then in seconds
All alone
I stand in aww
Left to moments fading..."
woh. amazing ending.
terrific write. -
ruler in the land of mirrors......you have a great way with words darky..very inspiring.....in gardens of a darker eden.....amazing stuf...xx
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Oh wow....this was just wonderful with visuals and emotions. altho I would not mind to find a dark Knight within my night and dreams. Well done.
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great imagery, you do indeed have a gift for painting pictures with words
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excellent
You have an amazing gift for painting a picture with words. I could almost feel a chill in the air, and could almost smell the perfume of the rose.
In your line " Then in seconds All alone I stand in aww" if by aww you mean wonderment then i think it is spelled *awe*.
If anything that would be the only change I would make.
Well done.
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Mirrors and Smoke
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This looks like wicked candy and the read doesn't let it's allure down either. Some intelligent metaphors masking an introspective reveal. Your imagery is rich as always and draws the reader in almost in suspense or a trance. Your versatility is very impressive.
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Well what is there to say but Bravo this is most excellent piece of poetry I have read in a while, your imagery and flow as just superb.
Thanks for sharing your gift of poetry with all of us that we should read and ponder.
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I love the imagery you've used in this piece. I can tell that you've put your heart & soul in it and its very strong. My favorite part was when you said " Darkest love, ruler
in the land of mirrors
to satisfy my purest craving
humbly he holds out
that single purple rose
Then in seconds
All alone
I stand in aww
Left to moments fading... "
Bravo .. Thanks for entering it in my contest, I enjoyed reading it
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Left in moments fading, mmmm, sounds like a premature detonation,
lovely write, or course, the build up of these visuals were suspense to say the least. Nice one. 
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Awesome...
Wonderful imagery wrapped in a strong narrative of dark fantasy... Love your use of mirrors here that works on a number of levels in battling of self, seeing a parody of illusion and being lost to it, reflection being a distortion of reality...
Impressive work as always...
Keep it up...
Well done!!!
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AMAZING !!!
i read this over and over and just cant get enough of it....the use of dark fantasy is magical.. this is going into my bookmarks...
your a creative and gifted writer
Shavonne x x
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Nicely done dear. You've got a great way with words. Only thing is the background is hard to read deary. You've made me kind of hot wanting to want wanting to long. Nicely done! Thanks for sharing sweetie. insubstantial... non-substantial.
Kahy
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