In this day there are too many legends
Film stars called heroes
Lauded by critics for their greatness
Emblazoned on t-shirts
Heroines of movies and catwalks
Payed millions of dollars to shine in a stadium
Collossus of stage and screen
But what of the real heroes
The quiet ones
The losers of friends and brothers
Forgotten so often
Taken for granted
Not today
Today we give thanks for their heroism
Their righteousness
Bravery and goodness girded them
Truth and justice were their armour
Today we remember
Those who came back to loved ones
And those who did not
Fallen heroes in far off lands
They stayed at their post to the last
And the last post ends their day
To them be glory and honour
To their memory we give this day
To their sacrafice we owe every day
Make us worthy of them
Our heroes
Our legends
A contest entry
- in memory of those who served and fell and those who survived by camo.egg.army.gurl.
1800 points, ended June 9, 46 entries
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Hi Chris D,
It is great to read a poem that acknowledges the increasingly forgotten real heroes. Our society has become too obsessed with the culture of celebrity!
The rhythm of this poem is perfect. I instinctively read each line singularly and as I did it felt as if I was in a march. I was then pleasantly surprised to read your recommenation on how to read this piece. I agree with your recommendation because to read it any other way takes away from the potency of this poem.
Well done,
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Good luck
If you are going through my stuff you are going to need good luck because they are very mixed. I only started writing again a couple of months ago having given up for years. It's really enjoyable to just express yourself and if it brings joy to anyone then that's a bonus.
Thanks for the comments on this one. Like everything if its read with sincerety then it means something otherwise its just a lot of words.
Grateful for you taking the time to read my stuff.
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Hi Chris D,
Thank you for your response - I appreciate it very much. When I read poems I predominantly do so from my gut. I am not familar with the technicality involved in writing poems. So when I read anybodys' poem on A.P I do so on a very subjective level and that is from my feelings. I have only responded to poets on A.P who have emotionally struck a chord with me. And when I read your poems I really value how I feel after reading them. I intend, therefore, to read more of yours for that reason alone. So thank you Chris D for sharing your creativiy with us on A.P. and I wish for you that you keep writing. And also 'Good Luck' to you,
Liveddog.
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WONDERFUL
I agree we have forgotten many of the heros of the yesterdays that we once loved, and not the ones from the movies. My grandfather was one, and so was my grandmother. and nearly most of my friends, from the every day cops, to EMTs and firefighters like the line you worte reads:
To their sacrafice we owe every day!
that line says so much more than we can express any day.
Thanks for the comment on mine and good luck in the contest I cant wait to read more of your work... once I get my new contacts in its quit hard right now to read the screen let alone see what I am typing... so please excuse any typos you see....
thanks again and good luck
Rae
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breathless
it seems a little awkward from the begining to end but i like the overall message you have some time to edit it if you want its just a suggestion...
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Thanks for yor comments
I think the awkwardness is in the way it's read. It needs to be taken on line at a time, slowly and not read as one line leading into another. It is as much in the reading as the flow. Thanks for giving me an opportunity to take part. I hope the day goes really well.
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