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For The First Time

For the first time I see you clearly
You are not drunk
You are sober
Your eyes are alert
For the first time I see you clearly

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  • AbundantBetrayals
    May 2
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    Watch the grammar line three needs to be fixed....but good idea...however maybe you should change clear in line four to another synonym like alert....or change the line to "Your eyes aware"...like your continuing the the line/thought before it....keep working on it!