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I'm fine,really.with you by my side.

I long to be that skinny,
I long to be that pretty,
I long to be so tiny,
Now, you池e with me.

You walked me to the hall of perfection,
There lies all dolls,fairies,angels,
Now I知 one of them,
So, stay with me in this hell.

I lie,
I starve,
Still,
It痴 never enough.

How does life feels like
Because I知 in hell,
How does healthy feels like,
Because I知 not well.

You致e never seen me in tears,
I won稚 let you see so,
Because I do not want to stop,
When I do,
You won稚 be by my side anymore.

I used to tell myself,
I知 almost there,
I知 a whale
I知 so close to perfection,
I知 fat,
I知 useless in my heaven,
But since you hugged me,
Lived my life,
Guided me,
Loved  me,
Comforted me in your hell,
Now,
I知 there,
I stay,
I belong,
I知 strong with willpower,
I知 never wanting,
I知 skinny,
I知 flying,
And I知 oh-so-perfect!


P/S:Living in your hell is better than living in my heaven

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  • Amethyst77
    June 20

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    I love the vibe of this. 'Comforted me in your hell' Is just a perfect line. It shows the utterly twisted core of eating disorders

  • xcandyman
    May 21
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    from the outside looking in, i would say you did very well. i have not dealt with this hell myself, but i am doing all i can to help my girlfiend through it now. she is a amazing writer and i plan to turn her onto this site as another tool in her recovery. keep up the good work. this is one of the best i have seen in this section.


  • LionessK silver member
    May 5
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    welcome to allpoetry

    You paint a vivid emotional picture... showing what it is like on the inside of this pain or "hell". It's sad to think how many suffer through this.
    Writing is an excellent way to vent... let all questions and thoughts express.

    Keep writing and enjoy your time on the site.



  • Lizzie-Moffat
    May 4
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    This is a good poem

    I can totally relate to this poem.


  • Snowing Kisses gold member
    May 4
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    this is an incredibly honest poem with tangiable emotion
    nice write welcome aboard


  • indigent
    May 3
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    im useless in my heaven

    great poem
    that line
    i think that alot
    just never knew how to say it


  • corsetsand-bones
    May 2
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    that was really really well written
    can totally relate.

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