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Murmurs

Door, open
Heart, exposed
House in order
Everything cloying, close
No dividing walls to speak of
            Looking up from living room to see my room, or my mother's
            Blankets draped over railings to give some semblance of individuality
                   But light womblike warm, tangerine tinted as if passing through skin
                               Illumes all equally
                                              Painted with the same dust

Doors, open
Parts, exposed
Take a souvenir
Piles of shoes
Hersmine, his?, oursmine
Take a souvenir
Idiot crackle of battered old TV everything
Open to the whispers of the infinite
Family together, house in order
All of them all ears, save mine
            Whose silence is husbanded, headphone counter culture cultivated
            Ever reading, the silence of print dancing in the air
                        My cocoon, wooden ark, tomb
                                    Womb, stillborn, comfort blanket, noose
Home.

 

[JM Francheteau]

Author notes

This poem is a contemplation on my adolescent years. Music plays a big part in my life, and I found that a lot of R.E.M.'s music particularly spoke to me. Thus, this poem throws in a few references to that band's music, such as it's title and the mantra-like repetition of the phrases "house in order" and "take a souvenir."

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  • the socks in the right drawer
    the underwear in the right another one
    dust the furniture
    shine the shoes
    straight up the kitch garden gnome

    cut your nails
    shave your deaf ear
    I can't live no place like here
    dying to leave

    comfort is a souvenir and a tombstone

  • Welcome to AllPoetry!

    I must say you have nailed R.E.M.'s song with in your words. Great take on the song. Thank you for sharing your work with us.
    ~~Shannon~~
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  • Welcome To Allpoetry

    I am a big fan of R.E.M.'s earlier stuff, so I really enjoyed this poem. I like the way you structured it, too. One particular thing that stuck to me was "light Womblike warm" ...that was an awesome description.
    Welcome to ALlpoetry and have fun. You are a talented poet!

    warm regards,
    Jeremy